Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, fashion is becoming poupular and many new dresses are influenced by global fashion trends. Global fashion have strong influenced on people's lives through many actors and models. I strongly believe that this is a positive development.

Most people are in race of fashion, they are regularly following latest fashion trends because they assume themself up-to-date according to world. As a result, fashion dresses are becoming popular. Moreover, most of models and actors also play important role in influencing individuals. people cinsider them role model of their trends. So, when they try different dresses, people assume this as latest fashion because they require attention and popularity among people. As a result they may highlited in public on social plateforms. For instance, most of social media influencers find a way to keep in gossips of pubplic. That's why they try something new and different resulting in more scrolled by people on tiktok and IG.

Global fashion have strong influence don citizens lives in this way. Whenever Big brands launch new articles, to increase its sale and demand they organize different fashion shows. In these fashion shows many models are hired by brands to represent their new article. As these models have popularity in public so they influence more people. Poeple consider these articles as latest trends of fashion. Hence, They purchase these articles as a result their demand increase and brand earn more money. This is a way, fashion become strong influence on people's lives. I also strongly believe that this development is positive because they change their clothes many time in a year and keep updated according to world. For instance, Nike have strong influencing models as a result their anual sales are more then other brands.

To conclude, People change many dresses because they try to update with latest fashion which is influenced by many social media characters. Moreover, Brands are reason behind influencing people's lives because they launched new articles and they make its hipe for growth in sale. It has positive effect on citizens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you explain the influence of models, social media and brands, and state that you see the development as positive. These are relevant points, but the explanation is only partly developed. For example, you describe how influencers attract attention and how brands use fashion shows, yet the positive view is mainly justified by people keeping their clothes “updated according to world.” This does not fully explain why that change benefits people or society. The Nike example refers to sales rather than demonstrating a positive effect on people’s lives. Develop the reasons behind your opinion and use examples that directly support them; also make the distinction between how fashion spreads and why its influence is positive clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group ideas about influencers and brands, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “As a result” and “To conclude” help signal relationships. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive: the first body paragraph returns several times to people following trends and seeking attention, while the second repeats that models and brands influence purchases. Some links are also unclear, as in “This is a way, fashion become strong influence,” and the conclusion largely restates earlier points rather than drawing them together. Organise each paragraph around one distinct explanation, then develop it in a clear sequence and use referencing that makes the connection between ideas explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “models,” “brands,” “fashion shows,” “social media influencers” and “sales.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the subject. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, particularly “articles” for clothing items and repeated uses of “influence” and “fashion.” Several spelling errors, including “poupular,” “cinsider,” “pubplic” and “anual,” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “in race of fashion,” “keep in gossips” and “more scrolled by people.” Build a more accurate set of collocations for describing trends, promotion and consumer behaviour, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because,” “as a result” and “whenever.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making relationships harder to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent: “Global fashion have” and “Nike have” should use singular agreement. Verb forms and sentence construction also need attention in “fashion is becoming” and “they launched new articles,” while “they change their clothes many time in a year” has errors in number and phrasing. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, especially after full stops. Practise accurate present-tense statements and complex sentences, checking agreement, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries.

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