Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There has been a global fashion trends that has been going viral among people and also the way of their dressing sense has been influenced by this global fashion brands.However, global brands are not only a simple brand but by applying certain strategies they are making large sums of money and fame out of it. Following this, spending large sums of money to promote and to buy their brand products is just waste of money. Many brands are using different strategies to grab the attention from the public.Invest your money on something that is worth it and valuable in the future,like property, gold or bitcoin investments.

The negative outcomes for buying and using luxury brands is that many people are just making those brands even more rich by investing and purchasing their products.Some people in different societies wear luxurious brands just to showcase even though they are familiar with the drawbacks.One of the main reason is that there are so many people that are getting influenced because there are so many Influencer's in the world they are literally promoting and sponsoring without knowing anything these brands by organising exhibitions.In contrast, it is negative development for the society that has been invented and organized by influencer's.

The positive influence of global fashion trends on people's lives, is that many people invest there money on the things which they know they will get benefitted from the product in the end fo the day. For example, many people invest their money on Birkin's and Diamonds.If people will do these types of investments they will get the same price value or sometimes even they make more money in return.However, instead of spending or being influenced by other fashion brands people need to think about the resluts and the profit.

In conclusion, fashion brands are not considered as an good investment and people need to stop purchase things from it. People need to think logically before making their minds to spend tons of money on meaningless fashion brands.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a generally negative position, especially in the opening and conclusion, and you identify influencer promotion as one reason global fashion has influence. However, the response only partially answers the question: much of the discussion argues that luxury purchases are poor investments, rather than explaining the broader ways global trends shape clothing choices and daily life. The positive paragraph is also confusing: Birkin bags and diamonds are presented as investments, but this does not clearly establish a positive effect of global fashion on people’s lives. Develop a few relevant causes—such as social media exposure, celebrity culture, and the desire to fit in—and support your judgement with a clear, consistent explanation and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, so there is some basic organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because ideas shift abruptly: the first paragraph moves from global trends to brand profits and then to property, gold and bitcoin. The paragraph beginning “The positive influence” conflicts with the mainly negative position and does not clearly connect its investment example to the question. Linking phrases such as “However,” “Following this,” and “In contrast” are used, but some do not express the relationship between the ideas accurately. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, order the reasons logically, and use pronouns and transitions to make connections explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “luxurious brands,” “promoting and sponsoring,” and “influenced,” which helps communicate the general subject. There is also an attempt to use more specific terms such as “exhibitions” and “investments.” However, the range is limited by repeated references to “brands,” “money,” and “people,” and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “dressing sense,” “grab the attention from the public,” and “the results and the profit.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “resluts” and “fo the day,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise collocations and vocabulary directly related to fashion influence, such as consumer pressure and social-media promotion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “One of the main reason is that there are so many people that are getting influenced because…” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “There has been a global fashion trends,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “One of the main reason,” which needs a plural noun. Other problems include “people invest there money,” “if people will do these types of investments,” and missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, pronouns and conditional forms, and use shorter, controlled sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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