Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The lots of aspects of the way individuals dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

Overall, we discussed about the advantage or disadvantage of this statement.

To commence with, in tadays world people want to attrect themselves front of others to follow new fashions. To elaborate it, if we waer some unique or fashinable so we look attrected and its ffeel confidence in front of others. For example, one thoury said that people feel more confidence or stunning whos follow fashion more then onters. Thus, its influnced public to dressed thier self like fashin treand. Furthermore, its also develop positive impact of are modes. if u do not know about fashion so you down your image front of other like if you wear anything so knowone notice you doeson't matter how much goodlocks you have. To explicate it, todays individuals judge you by your fashion sence, if you do fashion acording to treand so you are capable to acrchive everything in this world. For example, onr article said that good dressing sence shows your actuall persnality. And noticable globly and today world is aroung social media people are fowllow treand becouse they want to become famous on social sites its increage them to do nice dressed. For instance, its also affect negative development globaly like they just do everything about to be popular, and if they are they has to be chance to influence there treands. Hance, thats way people follow fashions which runs globaly and develop thire personalities throug these things.

In contrast, acording to my opinion glibal fhasion impact both developments negatiove or posative.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to address both questions: you mention wanting to attract others and the role of social media in spreading trends, and you refer to both positive and negative effects. However, the response only minimally answers the task because the explanation of how fashion became influential is unclear and the evaluation is not sustained. The opening says “we discussed about the advantage or disadvantage,” but this does not establish a clear position; the final sentence says the impact is both positive and negative without explaining which view you support. Examples such as “one article said” are vague and do not substantiate the claims. Develop a clear answer to each question, explain the mechanisms behind global influence, and support your view with specific, relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response using an opening, linking expressions such as “To commence with,” “Furthermore,” and “In contrast,” and a concluding statement. These signals show an effort to connect ideas. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the discussion moves from confidence and appearance to judging others, then social media, and then a brief contrast, without distinct paragraphs or a clear relationship between points. Several transitions, including “Thus” and “Hence,” do not make the reasoning easier to follow, and references such as “its” and “they” are unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the causes of fashion’s influence and your evaluation, and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You try to use vocabulary related to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “personality,” and “influence.” This gives the response some relevant language, but the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain the reader’s effort. Examples include “attrect,” “fashin treand,” “goodlocks,” and “fowllow”; phrases such as “do fashion” and “nice dressed” are also not natural collocations. Aim to learn accurate topic phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “follow current trends,” “make a positive impression,” and “gain visibility online” would help communicate your ideas clearly and avoid repeating “fashion” and “people.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “if you wear anything so knowone notice you,” and “if you do fashion acording to treand so you are capable to acrchive everything.” However, sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “people want to attrect themselves,” “it’s also develop,” and “they has to be chance.” Several sentences join clauses without clear punctuation or grammatical links, making the relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses with “because,” “although,” and “if”; check subject–verb agreement and verb forms in each sentence.

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