Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowdays , numerous individuals preferred by worldwide clothswhic is more fashionable. and fashions works like virus day by day its increases and influenced peoples to wear that has a both effect positive and negative. i firmly belived that positive effect is more convinient for people because it shows creativity of making cloths and huge opportunity to earn money.

First begin with, wearing different types of dress peoples influenced by creative designer whose are manufacturing quality full outfit for fashion concerns male and female also children. recent rechers shows that fashions lovers people are inreased day by day and this way helps to creative designers introduce infront of world. as a result which are far from fashions they also knows and get chance to wear these dresses.

On the one hand, designers main purpose is making money and produce huge amount of dress so that it distributed all over the world. many celebrities has personal designerwho are making very uncommon costume and demand a big amount. but these outfit cant wear ordinary people who are mostly lives village or belongs very middle family but nowadys social media they knows everything and maknig copydress andget satisfied. and sell online platfrom which is the most earning source nowadays.researchers says 70% money comes from cloth industries which helps to growth economy for country.

on the contrary, although peoples influenced by designer sometimes it has some negative effect on several family who are not interested on designer dresses but theur childrens or younger motivated from those people who are comfortly wear and influenced on social media . as a result family fallen a imfactful situations because they are very conservative and strict family andalso these fashinable dreses to buy required extra money that is impossible for middle family they are suffering in difficulty for their childrens.

In the conclusion, recently people are becoming more attractive to wear fashinable dresses and it making huge money for business holders and designer are becoming popularity for their creative knowledge, it helps to knowing the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that designers, celebrities and social media spread fashion, and you state that the development is positive because it encourages creativity and creates income. You also acknowledge a drawback, explaining that young people may pressure families to spend on fashionable clothes. However, the explanation of how global trends became influential is not fully developed, and the positive position is less consistent than the conclusion suggests: the paragraph beginning “On the one hand” mainly discusses affordability and copying rather than clearly evaluating the benefits. The claim that clothing industries provide “70%” of money is unsupported and unclear. To strengthen the response, explain the mechanisms of global influence more precisely and support each main point with a relevant, credible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also attempt signposting with “On the one hand” and “on the contrary.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the paragraph about designers moves from celebrity clothing to ordinary people copying outfits and then to national economic growth without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or mechanical, and the contrast between the two body paragraphs is not consistently clear. References such as “these outfit” and “those people” also make it harder to identify exactly what is being discussed. Organise each paragraph around one central claim, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global,” “creative designers,” “social media,” “conservative” and “economy,” and you try to express ideas about influence, affordability and business. However, the range is limited and many word choices, forms and spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “worldwide cloths,” “quality full outfit,” “maknig copydress” and “fashinable dresses.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “fashion concerns” and “huge amount of dress.” Build a more reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “international fashion trends,” “affordable clothing” and “influence consumer choices” over improvised combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “although” and “so that.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences difficult to follow. For example, “numerous individuals preferred by worldwide cloths” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “fashions works like virus day by day its increases” joins clauses incorrectly and has problems with agreement. There are also recurring issues with articles, plurals and verb forms, as in “many celebrities has” and “it making huge money.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unclear, particularly where several ideas are joined together. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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