Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modern times, there are a number of way individuals clothe influenced by woeld wide fashion trends. in this esaay i will exmine the reason how strongly the modern world fashion beacome a more popular on peopl exist and provide my overall opinion why i believe it is a postive development for the world and humans lives.

From an overall perspective, there is number of positve site for this development, perhaps the main reason is people are connected with modern generation,such as they often use modern technology and reliable with fashion world, modern fashion influencer assit peoples for their attractive dressdup,forexample, in western world they ware western dress for looks better or media program purposes, this is the benificial zone for them but the normal people are consume update information such as dress from this platfrom,it is not only advantegeous for models or influencer it's also helpful for modern society. Secondly, people are more smart than before, in the 19 era, in our country not comvenient with western site because of modern technology and it is created a long distance from western country, however, now a days everyone follow them and make their attitudes more smart and smart for modern soceity.

Despite this arguments, there also various negative aspects for society.one of the most obvious of this is relagious movement's , in this world there are a number of diffrent relagion with diffrent diffrent rituals, wesatern clothes noit suit for every where such as in asia zone like bangladesh is not allowed or people cannot take normal way western dress for public places. This because human faced difficulty in their nromal lives, as a result society diveded into two diffrent way. furthermore, in daily life the number of senior citizen,children and respected person who are vist every where but the young and generation they did not care about them, they ware anything like which is cope with normal street.

Ultimately, as with many topics, there are both positives and negatives, in my personal view is that is a postives development for the new generation, global fashion trend is important for modern society and this genarations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that technology and media help spread fashion, and you give a generally positive view while acknowledging concerns about religious and cultural expectations. However, the explanation of how fashion became influential remains unclear and only partly developed. For example, “people are connected with modern generation” and the reference to western clothing do not explain in detail how social media, advertising, or international brands shape choices. Your position is also mixed: you call the development positive, but the negative paragraph introduces substantial concerns without explaining how you weigh them against your view. Develop a few relevant reasons with specific examples, and state your overall judgement consistently from the introduction through the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate discussion of positive and negative aspects, and a concluding paragraph. Connectors such as “Secondly,” “however,” and “furthermore” show an effort to guide the reader. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear relationships. For instance, the discussion moves from technology and influencers to western clothing and then to ordinary people, without explaining each link. The contrast introduced by “Despite this arguments” is also unclear, and the conclusion repeats the positive view rather than resolving the contrast. Use one main idea per paragraph, explain how each example supports it, and use referencing and linking phrases more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “modern technology,” “religious” and “society,” and you try to express both benefits and drawbacks. However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make some meanings difficult to understand. Examples include “a number of way,” “fashion influencer assit peoples,” “religious movement's,” and “society diveded.” Some phrases, such as “smart and smart” and “cope with normal street,” are unclear or unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and word combinations carefully. Prefer precise expressions such as “influenced by,” “fashion influencers,” and “traditional dress codes” rather than assembling phrases whose meaning is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including sentences with “because,” “however,” and “as a result.” This shows an effort to connect causes and consequences. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation frequently make the reader work to understand the message. For example, “there is number of positve site” lacks an article and has faulty agreement, while “the normal people are consume update information” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, sentence boundaries, and capitalisation when editing.

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