Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

An increasing number of people are choosing to dressed by following the global fasion which is become popular . In my opinion there is a negative devolopment beacuse it can give negative impact to your society , increase monthly expenses and growing show-off mentality among the people.

Firstly, as a human being we are try to become as much as better than others. by wearing a perfect outfit gives us not only good look but also you feel confidence . Global company try to manupulate us by hiring celebraties . we easily follow them and think us like them .

Beisde, by following the global trend it is not always acceptable in many places. Every religion and Cast have various rules .Following this global fashion may not accepetable by the elder and harmful for their moral beliefs. Also, It's gives huge pressure to their household income. The global Big giant company try to launch or make different trend in every single day which makes them influence to follow or buy this. They spent a lerge number of money that is unnessesary most of time.

third , it creates a negative impact on our mind . we are become greddy and always thought about others perception. it is not only create distance by thinking about myself but also it is make us like monkey . We are try to become like others always in a competation .

in the conclusion, i think following some trend helps us to be a part of the world and makes us fashionable but we need to keep maintain our morality and choose ourselves first .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear negative position and identify several relevant effects, including pressure on household income, conflict with religious or cultural expectations, and concern about people copying celebrities. These points address the question’s evaluation of fashion trends. However, the first part—how global fashion became so influential—is only briefly explained through companies hiring celebrities, and the explanation is not extended with a clear example or further detail. Some claims, such as fashion making people “greedy” or “like monkey,” are broad and need explanation to show how they follow from global trends. Your conclusion also introduces a more balanced view without fully reconciling it with the negative position. Develop the causes and support each main effect more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the main points. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Beside,” and “third” signal the intended order. However, progression is sometimes difficult to follow because ideas are added without clear links: the paragraph about cultural acceptance moves quickly to household income, while the next shifts to self-image and competition. Some connectors are inaccurate or repetitive, and sentence boundaries and capitalization make the flow less smooth. Organise each body paragraph around one central idea, then explain it and give an example. Use linking phrases to show relationships between ideas rather than relying mainly on numbered transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global trend,” “household income,” “moral beliefs,” and “celebraties,” and you communicate several distinct concerns. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “negative impact to your society,” “we are become greddy,” and “makes us like monkey.” Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “fasion,” “devolopment,” “manupulate,” and “unnessesary.” These issues sometimes require the reader to interpret what you mean. Build a more precise set of phrases for influence, spending and social pressure, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example the sentence beginning “The global Big giant company try to launch…” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns and in attempts to combine ideas. Examples include “people are choosing to dressed,” “which is become popular,” “we are try,” and “it is not only create distance.” Subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries are often inaccurate, and inconsistent capitalization and punctuation further affect readability. Practise forming accurate present-simple and present-continuous sentences, then add subordinate clauses only when the basic structure is secure. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb and complete punctuation.

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