Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this period people mainly focuse on the way of dress today are influenced by global fashion trends because by wearing the fashionable dress people compare the whole lifestyile of that person as well as the character, family background will be justify by your dress. I think it's a positive development on the global fashion.

The foremost argument to justify my point is that; the global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives because of new technology such diffrent platfroms like facebook, instragram, tiktok and the whatsapp etc. For instance; Many people were interested on fashion through a global fashion trend through it provide a chance for those people who want to do extra ordinary things in their life. It becomes a strong influence on people's lives because people can show their talents infront of the world as well as it helps people to make their life more easier and perfect.

Futhermore, other reason to prove my point is that by social media people was more influence on fashion because of that people can show their new design from social media and other interested people can also learn about fashion by seei g your videos in youtube, tiktok and other app. it changed people life by helping in financial poblems and it's make people more capable and independent in their life.

In conclusion, I believe that global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives because it makes people more creativity and help them to show their talents in front of the whole world. It makes people more confident and independent on their own life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear opinion—“I think it's a positive development”—and identify social media as the main reason global fashion spreads. You also mention possible benefits, such as showing talent and becoming financially independent. However, the task is only partially addressed: the explanation of how fashion influences people is repetitive, and the positive effects are asserted rather than supported with a specific example or developed reasoning. The response also contains 240 words, so it is 10 words below the required minimum; 28 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain the influence more fully and develop a concrete example showing how a trend affects people’s choices or opportunities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “The foremost argument,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of your answer. However, progression within the body paragraphs is limited: both largely repeat that social media spreads fashion and helps people show talent. Some connections are unclear, particularly the move from fashion videos to “financial problems” and independence. The opening sentence is also difficult to follow, which makes the central point less clear. Organise each body paragraph around one distinct reason, then explain how it supports your view, using clear references and transitions rather than repeating the same claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “design,” “talents,” and “independent,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “the way of dress,” “interested on fashion,” and “more capable and independent in their life.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “lifestyile,” “diffrent,” and “Futhermore.” Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe how people “follow fashion trends” and how social platforms “expose users to new styles,” rather than relying on repeated general references to fashion and social media.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “because of new technology” and a concluding sentence that gives your opinion. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the message difficult to follow. For instance, “the global fashion become” needs a correctly formed verb, while “people was more influence” has problems with both agreement and structure. The opening sentence also combines several ideas without a clear grammatical framework. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then connect them with subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement and verb tense, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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