Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, Some people argued that,many aspects of the way individuals dress are influenced by global fashion trend. Other believe that global fashion become such a strong influence on people lives.from my perspective,this development has few positive aspects and it also has some negative effect.

Firstly, one biggest advantages is that, urban areas fashion is high as compared to rarual.for instance, in big cities, Numerous individuals also fallow the branded fashion to show case their personality, style and taste. In the world, mostly people buy brand cusual clothes and shoes in family gathering, ceremony, wedding and anniversary.furthermore,expensive and stunning design clothes also improve their human beings influences. In addition,global fashion can generate better discipline and mre confident.for examples, uniform forms is very significant global fashion for children to create enhancing the personality and diligence. Social media also teach to all people about important fashion design.

Another Paramount benefits is that,mostly celebrities are understand and renowed because of dresses else great influence.consequently, Some younger adults fallow the social media and famous celebrities fashion.

However,this development has some disadvantages, branded clothes, shoes and perfumes are more expensive.Therefore, everybody cannot purchased brand

things, because Some people have not earn enough money.Moreover,Some men and women see popular design on the internet,and trust on advertising, subsequently, people spend money to the unessential things.

In conclusion, global fastion become to invincible on people life and improve influence.branded fashion make more attractive to individuals personality,and style.other people have no good salery and expensive things calso also be a reason. I think that , advantages is also more enjoyable and disadvantages is reduce.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by mentioning possible influences, such as celebrities and social media, and by presenting both benefits and drawbacks. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: the explanation of how global fashion became influential is brief, and your position on whether this is positive or negative is not consistently clear. The opening says there are “few positive aspects” and “some negative effect,” while the conclusion says the advantages are “more enjoyable” but does not clearly state an overall judgement. Several points, including uniforms and branded clothing at family events, are introduced without explaining how they demonstrate global influence. Develop two or three relevant reasons with specific examples and state your view clearly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposting such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore” and “However” shows an attempt to organise ideas. Nevertheless, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several points are placed together without clear links: the discussion moves from urban fashion to family gatherings, uniforms, social media and celebrities. Some connectors are repetitive or do not show the intended relationship, and the second paragraph begins “Another Paramount benefits” without clearly connecting this point to the explanation of influence. The conclusion also repeats ideas rather than drawing them together. Group related points into focused paragraphs and use linking phrases only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “branded fashion,” “personality,” “celebrities,” “advertising” and “expensive,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the usable range is limited, and frequent spelling, word-form and collocation errors sometimes make meaning unclear. Examples include “fallow” for “follow,” “cusual” for “casual,” “renowed,” and “global fastion.” Phrases such as “improve their human beings influences” and “fashion is high” are difficult to interpret because the word combinations are unnatural. Build a bank of accurate expressions for describing influence, trends and consumer behaviour, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with connectors such as “because,” “while” and “consequently.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation, sometimes making the message hard to follow. For example, “Other believe that global fashion become” lacks agreement and an appropriate verb form, while “everybody cannot purchased” uses the wrong verb form. Several sentences also run together, as in the opening, where full stops and capitalisation are missing. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for verb agreement, tense and punctuation.

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