Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many aspects of the global world affect people`s life in many ways. Today`s world is a global world. We live in an era of advanced technology. Like traditional values global world interferes in every way of our life.

Firstly, if we discuss about global fashion trends, we should not dey about this fact that our life is really influenced by its impects. The way people dress is must follow by the world`s fashion.

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For example, When we have to buy a dress for any occasion, we keep in mind today`s fashion. If we select a dress without any thinking than we feel hesitation to where this dress on any special event. because our minds are in the grip of fashion trends.

Secondly, this globalization has many positive and negative results in our life.

For example, if we belong to a traditional family then we have to face some restrictions related to wearing a dress and in other matters. In this way we feel irretation to go on social gathering and wearing a dress which doesn`t cop up with demanding fashion.

On the paradaxical side the positive aspect of the globalization is that we feel that we are up date with every new way of life and we can compet easily eever field of life.

To sum up i suggest that we implement global fashions in our dressing. but we must keep in mind the values of our culture and religion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a position in the conclusion: global fashion can be adopted, but cultural and religious values should be respected. You also mention both positive and negative effects, including pressure to follow trends and restrictions in traditional families. However, the task asks specifically how global fashion became influential, and this is barely explained: technology is mentioned only generally, without showing how social media, advertising, or international brands spread trends. The discussion of whether this is positive or negative is also limited and somewhat unclear, since the conclusion supports adopting fashion while the body gives little evaluation. The response is 9 words below the required minimum, which further limits the development of your ideas. Add specific explanations and examples for both parts of the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “To sum up” help the reader identify the stages of your answer. The examples about choosing clothes for an occasion and facing family restrictions are relevant to the points around them. However, progression is not consistently clear: the opening repeats the idea of a “global world,” while the first body paragraph does not clearly explain the causes of fashion’s influence. Some links are mechanical, and the relationship between the negative effects and the later positive point is not fully developed. The isolated full stop after the second paragraph also interrupts the flow. To improve, give each paragraph one clear purpose and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “traditional values,” “social gathering,” and “culture and religion,” so the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make meaning less clear, such as “impects,” “irretation,” “paradaxical,” and “cop up with.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “the way people dress is must follow by the world’s fashion” and “compete easily every field of life.” Aim for accurate collocations and a wider range of terms for influence and change. Proofread spelling carefully, and choose words that express your intended meaning precisely rather than relying on broad phrases such as “new way of life.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if we belong to a traditional family then we have to face some restrictions.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “The way people dress is must follow” has an incorrect verb construction, while “If we select a dress without any thinking than we feel hesitation to where this dress” contains problems with clause structure and verb forms. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in the lower-case “because” after a full stop and “i” in the conclusion. Practise building accurate sentences with “if” clauses and infinitive or modal verb patterns, then check sentence boundaries and capital letters.

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