Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening.
explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and get into the house
tell your relative how to get from the train station to your house
say when you will be home and suggest what you could do together that evening
Student answer (Band 4.5)
dear arsh,
i am writing this letter to inform you that when you come to my home i am not available that time because i busy on my work place that time .
when you reach at the station my friend kunal picked you and drop at my house and he will be provide my home keys.
in my house when you reach i was make rise for you that are place in a frezue you can pick and eat some fruits and milk.
when i reach at home evening time i booked a movie show ticket and i will be watched together and enjoy it.
i hope you will receive this letter
your faithfully
ajay
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You address the main situation and include a friend who will meet your relative, provide the keys, and take them to the house. You also mention food in the fridge and suggest watching a film together. However, the directions from the station are not really explained: saying Kunal will pick them up does not tell your relative how to travel if plans change or what route to take. The arrival arrangements and evening plan are also very brief, and “when I reach at home evening time” does not give a clear time. The response is 116 words, below the required 150, so several task details remain underdeveloped. Add clear directions, a specific return time, and fuller practical information.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The letter follows a broadly sensible order: it explains your absence, describes the pickup and food, and then mentions an evening activity. This gives the reader some organisation, and the ideas are generally related to the task. However, the response is presented as one block, with no clear paragraphing, and the links between ideas are limited. Repeated time phrases such as “that time” and “when you reach” make the progression feel repetitive rather than smooth. The closing, “i hope you will receive this letter,” does not connect naturally to the arrangements. Separate the letter into short paragraphs and use clear transitions to guide the reader from arrival, to getting inside, to the evening plan.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use basic vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “station,” “home keys,” “fruits and milk,” and “movie show ticket,” so the main topic is usually identifiable. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings are inaccurate, which can make the message less clear. For example, “picked you and drop at my house” is not a natural way to describe the arrangement, and “rise” appears to be an incorrect word for the food you prepared. “Frezue” is also difficult to recognise. Use more precise everyday expressions for travel, access, and plans, and check spelling carefully. A wider set of familiar phrases would make the letter clearer without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response mainly uses short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “when” and “because.” These attempts show some effort to form longer sentences, but control is weak and errors occur frequently. For example, “i busy on my work place” is missing a verb, while “my friend kunal picked you and drop” shifts between verb forms. “I was make rise” and “i will be watched together” also have faulty verb structures that obscure the intended meaning. Capitalisation and sentence punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and names. Practise accurate present and future forms for arrangements, and use simple, complete sentences before attempting longer clauses.
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