Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my problematic situation as I am enrolled in an evening course this year. However, I am very busy with my studies and family care. Therefore, I would like to pursue that program in next year.

The main reason behind leaving the course is my family care. I have one small brother and he is just 1 year old. I am taking care of his meal and hygiene after my school. As my parents are working in the evening I need to be at home with my brother.

I will attain all the classes in the morning and for the afternoon courses I will join online via a zoom meeting. This way I will be on track for my studies. However, the new evening course is hard for me to enroll so I will take that in next year.

It would really appreciated if you can provide me advice how I can manage all my studies and home care on a same day. I really want to join the evening course but the timing is the main issue.

Yours faithfully,

AP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you explain that caring for your one-year-old brother while your parents work prevents you from attending, state that you want to take the course next year, and ask for advice. The reason is supported with relevant detail about meals, hygiene, and your responsibilities after school, so the reader understands the situation. Your request for advice is also explicit, although it focuses broadly on managing study and home care rather than asking what formal options the course provider can offer, such as deferral or transferring enrolment. The paragraph about attending morning classes and joining afternoon courses online is somewhat unclear and does not fully explain how it relates to the evening course. Clarifying your preferred arrangement and asking directly about deferral would make the response more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce the problem, explain its cause, describe a possible study plan, and finish by requesting advice. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and connectors such as “However,” “Therefore,” and “As” make relationships between ideas visible. This gives the response a coherent progression. Some links are less clear, however. The shift from wanting to take the programme next year to attending morning classes and online afternoon courses is abrupt, and “However” does not clearly show how the new evening course is difficult to enrol in. The final request also repeats the timing issue without connecting it to a specific question for the recipient. Make these transitions more explicit and use references such as “this arrangement” only when their meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for explaining the situation, and phrases such as “family care,” “timing is the main issue,” and “on track for my studies” communicate the central ideas. You also attempt more formal language with “pursue” and “provide me advice,” showing some range. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this letter: “express my problematic situation” is awkward, “attain all the classes” does not mean attend them, and “family care” is less natural than “caring for my brother.” “Meal and hygiene” would be clearer as “meals and personal hygiene.” These choices do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for common, accurate collocations, especially in formal requests, rather than selecting a more formal-sounding word that does not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including a subordinate clause in “As my parents are working in the evening…” and a conditional structure in “It would really appreciated if…”. Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are present. The conditional needs a passive verb: “It would be appreciated if you could…” Also, “in next year” should be “next year,” and “on a same day” should be “on the same day.” In “I will attain all the classes in the morning,” the intended meaning would be expressed grammatically as “I will attend all the morning classes.” Review articles, verb forms, and sentence patterns in requests. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control while preserving the range you already attempt.

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