Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.
explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
say what you would like to do about your studies
ask for advice about what you can do about the situation
Student answer (Band 6.5)
To,
The department of enrolment,
Date- 12 July, 2026.
Subject- Regarding the enrolment of evening classes .
I want to let you know that in this term i am not able to attend the classes in evening because in the evenings i have very busy schedule. I am doing work in the day time 11 to 7 at a clothing store and in the evening after work i am going to Sikh temple there is i am working as volunteer and i helped there old people. which i can't skip so i would like to continue this course in next term .
Moreover, I would do studies related to that in my own time when i get free time so that for next term i am fully prepared for that before. I also want some help from you can you please help me in this situation that what should i do and how i can tackle this problem which i am facing right now. If you can help me that would be great for me and i am very appreciated your help.
your sincerely,
Harwinder singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your situation, stating your intention to defer, and asking for advice. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention volunteering at a temple, the explanation of why this prevents you from attending evening classes could be more clearly linked to your schedule. To reach a higher band, ensure that your reasons are fully elaborated and that the letter follows a standard formal structure, including a clear opening and closing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is generally coherent, and the progression of ideas is logical. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'If you can help me'. However, the paragraphing is not standard for a formal letter, and there is a lack of variety in linking words. Some sentences are run-on, such as the one beginning 'I am doing work in the day time...', which makes the flow feel a bit mechanical. Improving your use of transition words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would improve the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'enrolment', 'volunteer', and 'tackle this problem'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'I am doing work' instead of 'I am working' and 'I am very appreciated your help' instead of 'I would greatly appreciate your help'. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and formal expressions used in business correspondence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation (e.g., 'i' should always be capitalized, and there are missing commas). The sentence structure is often repetitive, and some sentences are grammatically incomplete or incorrectly joined. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for capitalization and punctuation will significantly improve your score.
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