Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Respected Sir,

I hope you are well. I am writing regarding this mail I am enroll in my evening class my course is computer science and my enrollment id is [redacted phone]. So I have issues with my evening class because I am as a student as well I just found my part time job that one also in evening time. In this reason I am thinking I need to take this course in next term.

This is my one of the favourite course I want to attend all the class and my lab. Additionaly, I can focus on my assignments then my result is Upgrate.

In this situation I need advise from your side. I need to manage my regular expense like Tenant, Utility bills , Transportation etc. If you give me another advice or any idea then let me know. You can contact me any time.

Thanks for your Support.

Sincerely,

Mitali Bipinkumar Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining the situation, stating your intention to defer, and asking for advice. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding your part-time job is clear, but the request for advice is slightly vague, as you ask for 'any idea' without specifying what kind of administrative or financial support you are seeking. To improve, ensure your tone remains consistently formal throughout, and provide more specific details regarding the course deferral process to better meet the requirements of a formal letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your message. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, 'In this reason' is not a standard collocation, and the transition between the explanation of your job and your request for advice feels abrupt. While the overall progression is clear, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in light of this' to connect your ideas more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your situation clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'enrollment,' 'assignments,' and 'utility bills.' However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'Upgrate' (upgrade), 'Tenant' (rent), and 'this is my one of the favourite course.' These errors do not prevent understanding, but they do limit the precision of your writing. Expanding your vocabulary to include more formal, academic, or professional collocations would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, articles, and prepositions (e.g., 'I am enroll' instead of 'I am enrolled,' 'in next term' instead of 'next term'). Additionally, there are issues with sentence boundaries and punctuation, such as the run-on sentence in the first paragraph. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement.

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