Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

DEAR SIR/MAM

I'm Swati belong to middle class family and i am from English spoken evening course. I just want to tell you; I am too busy in doing my regular job. I could couldn't manage my class with my job. Because I have financially burden due to my parents' health problem, so I need money for my parents' treatment.

Additionally, I would like to start my study in next term instead of doing now. Hope you understand my situation. My gentle request is that please accept me request. I will always be grateful to your mam.

If you want to give me any kind of advice to me then please just give me a solution at this phase of my life, so I can find a solution to tackle with my current situation. Because I believe only supportive and caring person can give right advice at right time especially when people facing some serious issue in life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the task: explaining the situation, stating the desire to defer, and asking for advice. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding the 'middle class family' is unnecessary personal information that does not directly serve the task. The request for advice is also quite vague and repetitive. To improve, focus on providing more specific details about the course or the nature of the work conflict, and ensure the tone remains professional throughout the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is basic and occasionally mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'Because' to start sentences. The transition between the explanation of the situation and the request for advice could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'I am from English spoken evening course' and 'I have financially burden'. These errors occasionally hinder the natural flow of the text. The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive, relying on simple structures to convey meaning. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to formal correspondence and work-life balance, and pay closer attention to word forms (e.g., 'financial burden' instead of 'financially burden').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include 'I could couldn't manage', 'doing my regular job', and 'accept me request'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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