Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you regarding my enrolment of evening cooking classes as nowadays as I am too busy at my work and my family scheudle that my daughter comes at home at home in evening time and I cannot leave her alone at home.

First of all , i would like this course because of interest in culnery skills . I have done diploma related this course many years ago that is why I want to improve my skills and advance knowledge about this course .Nowadays most advance techniques and machines have come in many restaurants but I have no less information when I would continue this course then I can learn diffiently .

I would like to learn with full of energy. Could you change my term as I provided my circumstance of changing this term .

I look forward to hear from you soon .

Yours Faithfully,

Nimar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your situation, stating your desire to defer, and asking for advice. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding your work and family schedule is a bit repetitive, and the request for advice is quite vague. To improve, ensure that each point is fully expanded with clear, logical sentences. For example, instead of simply stating you are busy, you could provide a more specific reason for the scheduling conflict to make your request for a deferral more persuasive and professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter follows a basic structure, but the flow between ideas is often disjointed. While you use some transition words like 'First of all', the connection between your interest in the course and your request to change terms is not smooth. Paragraphing is present, but the sentences within the paragraphs often lack logical progression. For instance, the second paragraph jumps from your interest in culinary skills to a discussion about modern techniques without a clear link. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors ('scheudle', 'culnery', 'diffiently') and awkward word choices ('no less information'). These errors occasionally force the reader to pause to understand your meaning. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary related to the context of a formal request, such as 'deferment' instead of 'change my term'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes, as these detract from the professional tone required for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Your writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with prepositions and verb tense consistency (e.g., 'my daughter comes at home at home', 'I have no less information when I would continue'). There is also an issue with punctuation and capitalization, such as the space before the comma in 'First of all ,'. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures and pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage. Reviewing basic sentence construction will help reduce the frequency of errors that currently impede the clarity of your message.

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