Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you for shifting my current enrollment of Information Security to next semester and also need some advice regarding this situation. I am recently get enrolled in an evening course but due to some sudden changes in my office timings I cannot manage to attend the classes.

Furthermore, I am a very brilliant student and I want to pursue my education that's why I would like to rejoin this program in upcoming term. I have several skills in encryption also I need some more knowledge about decryption.

Moreover, I would be grateful if you could advise me about the procedure for transferring my enrolment to the next semester. I would also like to know whether I need to submit any documents or pay an additional fee for this change.

I look forward to receiving your advice and hope you will consider my request favorably.

Yours faithfully,

Rabia Kanwal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explain the situation regarding your office timings, state your intention to rejoin the course in the next term, and ask relevant questions about the transfer procedure and potential fees. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, ensure that your explanation of why you cannot continue is more concise and focused, as the mention of being a 'brilliant student' and your specific skills in encryption is slightly irrelevant to the core task of requesting a deferral.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'that's why' to link your ideas. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, try to vary your cohesive devices further and ensure that the transition between your personal skills and the request for advice is smoother, as the current connection feels slightly abrupt.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'enrollment', 'procedure', and 'favorably'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'request you for shifting' (should be 'request to shift') and 'I am recently get enrolled' (should be 'I recently enrolled'). While these do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over verb forms and prepositional phrases to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and auxiliary verbs, such as 'I am recently get enrolled' and 'I am writing this letter to request you for shifting'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on mastering the present perfect tense for recent actions and refining your use of infinitives after verbs like 'request'.

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