Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.
explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
say what you would like to do about your studies
ask for advice about what you can do about the situation
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this to express my concern regarding the French learning course, in which I enrolled in an evening session. Unfortunately, I would like to discontinue this from the next week, because of too many students to learn in the same session.
For that reason, I cannot fully focused and interact with the my tutor for any queries.
Furthermore, I would like to have an advise that what other things that I could do during this period of time. As far as this course is an optional choice for me, I am keen on doing volunteer work at hospital which assist me to get practical knowledge to apply at college.
Above mentioned is my current scenario, and would your valuable inputs to get rid of this situation, where I can get a refund of my course fees.
It would be highly appreciated, if you could guide me on this matter.
Yours sincerely,
Rishil
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt, although the execution is somewhat inconsistent. You explain the situation regarding the course, state your desire to postpone, and ask for advice. However, the explanation for why you cannot continue is slightly confusing; you mention 'too many students' as the reason, which is a valid point, but the connection to your request for a refund is not clearly linked to the initial reason provided. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the request for advice is slightly muddled by the inclusion of your volunteer work plans, which distracts from the primary goal of the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the introduction, the explanation, and the request. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Above mentioned is my current scenario' and 'For that reason'. The flow between the explanation of the classroom environment and your desire to volunteer is a bit disjointed, making the transition between ideas feel abrupt. While the overall message is easy to follow, the connections between sentences could be more fluid to achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using phrases like 'discontinue', 'valuable inputs', and 'highly appreciated'. However, there are several instances of inaccurate word choice and collocation errors. For example, 'I cannot fully focused' should be 'I cannot fully focus', and 'have an advise' is incorrect as 'advice' is an uncountable noun. Additionally, 'get rid of this situation' is not a natural collocation in this formal context. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors indicate a limited control over more precise or academic vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'in which I enrolled in an evening session' (redundant preposition), 'interact with the my tutor' (incorrect article usage), and 'as far as this course is an optional choice' (incorrect usage of 'as far as'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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