Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 4.0)

i like to inform you about my evening course that i can not able to attend due to my family situation my father has suffered in hospital and i have to be with him in the evening.

i really want you to advise me if i can move that course in the morning because my mother have time in morning so she will stay with my dad so i can attend the course

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 73 words long. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have mentioned the family situation and requested a change to the morning, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. You have not provided a formal opening or closing, nor have you fully explored the options or asked for advice in a professional manner. To improve, you must expand on each bullet point, providing more context and detail to ensure the letter reaches the required length and demonstrates a complete response to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks a clear structure. There is no formal salutation (e.g., 'Dear Sir/Madam') or sign-off (e.g., 'Yours faithfully'). The text is presented as two short paragraphs that lack logical progression or cohesive devices. There are no linking words to connect your ideas, making the flow disjointed. To improve, you should use standard letter-writing conventions, including clear paragraphing for each bullet point and transition words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' to guide the reader through your explanation and request.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You rely on simple, everyday language that lacks the formal tone required for a letter to an educational institution. For example, 'i like to inform you' is informal; 'move that course' is imprecise. There is no attempt to use less common or topic-specific vocabulary. To achieve a higher band, you need to incorporate more formal expressions and precise terminology related to course enrollment and scheduling. Focus on expanding your range of vocabulary to better convey your situation professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. You have issues with subject-verb agreement ('my mother have time'), sentence structure (run-on sentences), and basic punctuation (lack of capital letters and full stops). The use of 'can not able to' is grammatically incorrect. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring proper capitalization, and using correct verb forms. You should also practice combining simple sentences into more complex ones using conjunctions and relative clauses.

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