Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request a defer to next term for my evening course that I recently enrolled in your university. I was really excited to join classes next month. But suddenly, an unforeseen family urgency has come up. Therefore, I would not be able to continue.

Actually, my father got transfer to another city for next few months as he serves in military. His job placements change frequently. My whole family is moving next month so I can not stay alone at home. Because I am unable to handle all along.

I has been interested in Graphics for many years. unfortunately, due to financial conditions could not take course. It closely aligns with my current job at visual presenter at IT software company. Hence, It is a great opportunity for me to improve my skills and grow professionally.

Your suggestion would be appreciated on what should I do to hold my seat for next term. What criteria to follow and documents needed to enroll in next term course?

I hope you understand. I look forward to prompt response from you.

Your sincerely,

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly explain the situation regarding your family's relocation and why you cannot attend. You state your desire to defer your studies and ask for the necessary procedures to secure your seat. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, ensuring the reader understands your circumstances and your request. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between your current job and the course is more concisely integrated, as the current explanation feels slightly tangential to the primary request of deferral.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices like 'Therefore' and 'Hence' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. For example, the transition between your family situation and your interest in the course could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the explanation, the personal context, and the request for information. Overall, the message is easy to follow and the progression of ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'unforeseen', 'aligns', and 'professionally'. There are some minor word choice issues, such as 'request a defer' (should be 'request a deferral') and 'visual presenter' (likely 'visual designer' or 'presentation specialist'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. You rely on some repetitive structures, but the vocabulary is generally appropriate for a formal request letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'my father got transfer' (should be 'was transferred'), 'I has been interested' (should be 'I have been'), and 'I look forward to prompt response' (should be 'a prompt response'). These errors are frequent but do not impede the overall communication of your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the variety of error-free complex sentences will help you achieve a higher score.

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