Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to request a deferment of a course to the next term in which I am enrolled.

I am doing a part-time job with my studies to manage my living and tuition expenses. However, I had been doing the morning shifts only for six months, that is the reason I have enrolled myself for the evening classes. However, my company have opened a new branch in other town and transferred many employees to this new branch which result in the increased workload on remaining employees until new hiring will not take place. So, my manager is expecting from me to work in the evenings as well. Thus, my classes are contradicting with my new work schedule.

I was wondering if you could defer me in the next term which will help me to continue the job. Moreover, I have been promised by the manager that they will provide me more days off once their hiring process will be completed. This will give me extra time to focus more on studies and will increase my performance in studies without quitting my job.

I would appreciate it if you could suggest me any alternative to address this situation. I look forward to your prompt response with some possible solutions.

Thank you froe your time and consideration.

Yours sincerely,

PJ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0

The response successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the situation regarding your part-time job and the unexpected transfer of employees, which has led to a scheduling conflict. You also state your intention to defer the course to the next term and appropriately ask for advice on how to handle the situation. The tone is consistently formal and appropriate for a letter to an educational institution. The ideas are well-developed and the purpose of the letter is clear from the outset, meeting all the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph serves a distinct purpose: the introduction states the purpose, the body paragraphs explain the situation and the proposed solution, and the conclusion provides a polite closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Thus', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to reach the highest band. Overall, the paragraphing is sufficient and the information is easy to follow throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly. Phrases like 'request a deferment', 'manage my living and tuition expenses', and 'prompt response' are well-chosen and appropriate for the context. There are some minor word choice issues, such as 'classes are contradicting with' (should be 'conflicting with') and 'defer me in the next term' (should be 'defer my enrollment to'). Despite these occasional inaccuracies, your vocabulary is varied enough to convey your meaning precisely without impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'my company have opened' (subject-verb agreement), 'until new hiring will not take place' (awkward phrasing/tense usage), and 'suggest me any alternative' (should be 'suggest any alternative to me'). Additionally, there is a minor typo in the final sentence ('froe'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of future tenses in subordinate clauses.

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