Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.
explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
say what you would like to do about your studies
ask for advice about what you can do about the situation
Student answer (Band 5.0)
hello advicer i joined a course in your for English speaking and writing, but it is getting very hard for me to concentrate on my studies. reason being there are too many students, and it is very noisy, which makes it hard to think and write. so i was hoping if i could join your online study program instead; that would help me a lot. or maybe if you could move me to another batch with a fewer students so i can focuse more i can also attend the evening clases.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 91 words. This significant under-length results in an incomplete response that fails to develop the required points sufficiently. While the student identifies the situation and asks for advice, the lack of development means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, the student must expand on the reasons for the difficulty, provide more context regarding the desired course change, and use a formal letter structure, including appropriate salutations and sign-offs, which are currently missing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as a single, informal block of text without paragraphing. There is a lack of logical progression or clear structure expected in a formal letter. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, making the flow of ideas feel disjointed. The informal tone, such as starting with 'hello advicer', is inappropriate for a formal request. To improve, the student should use clear paragraph breaks for each bullet point and incorporate linking words like 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in addition' to connect ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple phrases like 'hard for me' and 'help me a lot'. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary related to academic courses or formal correspondence. Spelling errors such as 'clases' and 'focuse' are present, and the word choice is generally too informal for the context of a formal request to an institution. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise academic and professional terminology is essential for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in punctuation and sentence structure. The response lacks capital letters at the beginning of sentences and uses informal, run-on sentence structures. There are errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'batch with a fewer students'. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, proper capitalization, and the use of more complex sentence forms to demonstrate control over English grammar.
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