Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Task 1

Dear sir,

I am writing to inform you that i have enrolled in your evening classes but later i realised my working schedule is too tight to continue my classes with you.

I have 9 to 5 job and my scheme is too busy to continue the classes thats why i decided to take my classes in next term because i cannot manage work and job together and at this point i really need of work to continue my bread and butter.

I am really worried about my decision and i really feel dis hearted. Besides i really love this course it would be a career changing opportunity for me.i really want you to give me piece of advice about the situation i am going through right now.

Thank you for your reading and i looked forward to hearing from you soon.I am keen to stay connected with this course.

Your faithfully

Benash Aqeel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You explained your situation regarding your work schedule, clearly stated your intention to defer the course to the next term, and requested advice on how to proceed. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout. To improve, ensure that you provide slightly more detail in your explanation to fully develop your ideas, as some parts feel a bit repetitive, such as the mention of your work schedule. Overall, you have met the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You have used paragraphing to separate your ideas, which helps the reader follow your message. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat limited. Phrases like 'thats why' and 'Besides' are used, but the flow could be improved with a wider range of linking words or transition phrases to connect your sentences more fluidly. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure would benefit from more sophisticated transitions to move between the explanation of your situation and your request for advice.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some relevant phrases such as 'career changing opportunity' and 'enrolled in your evening classes'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'my scheme is too busy' (where 'schedule' would be more appropriate) and 'need of work' (which should be 'need to work'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to professional and academic contexts and ensure that collocations are natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, including punctuation issues (e.g., missing spaces after periods, 'i' not capitalized), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing like 'I have 9 to 5 job'. Additionally, the closing 'Your faithfully' is incorrect; it should be 'Yours faithfully'. These errors occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of the text. Focusing on basic sentence construction, capitalization, and proofreading for common slips will help improve your score in this area.

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