Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter regarding my evening course which i am not able to complete because of my hectic schedule and want this to be deferred to the next term. Recently, I got a job into cybersecurity and as a fresher in this field, i need to spend sometime outside my work schedule on learning new skills and technologies. Moreover, its easy for me in the next term which is going to be the summer term as classes have very flexible schedule as compared to regular classes. This was my dream job and since the demand of artificial intelligence is increasing, i cannot leave this course and planning to study this course next term. Furthermore, the volunteer withdrawal date for this course is next and i am also open to any suggestion or advices regarding this course that could help to finish this course.

Your Faithfully,

Navkaran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the situation, stating your desired outcome, and asking for advice. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While you explain your new job, the connection between the job and the specific request to defer the course could be more clearly articulated. Additionally, the request for advice is a bit vague, as you mention being open to suggestions but do not specify what kind of information you need (e.g., refund policies or credit transfers). To improve, ensure each point is fully expanded with clear, logical transitions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the situation to the request and finally to the call for advice. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is non-existent; the entire letter is written as a single block of text. For a formal letter, it is essential to use clear paragraph breaks to separate the introduction, the body of the argument, and the closing. Improving your paragraphing will significantly enhance the readability and structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'hectic schedule', 'deferred', and 'cybersecurity'. There are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'got a job into' (should be 'got a job in') and 'volunteer withdrawal' (likely meant 'voluntary withdrawal'). The phrase 'some advice' is more natural than 'any suggestion or advices', as 'advice' is an uncountable noun. To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and ensure you are using vocabulary that fits the formal context of the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'i' should always be capitalized as 'I'. You also have issues with articles and prepositions, such as 'spend sometime' (should be 'spend some time') and 'demand of artificial intelligence' (should be 'demand for'). Additionally, 'its easy for me' should be 'it is easier for me'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy score.

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