Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.
explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
say what you would like to do about your studies
ask for advice about what you can do about the situation
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear sir,
I am writing this letter to you regarding the evening course I chose at the beginning of this term.Unfortunately,I want to discontinue this course for now and will join in the next semester.
There are some issues that are causing me really hard. Actually, I am alone and nobody from my family to support me here.That’s why, I started the job in the evening after my classes to earn money for my personal expenses and tuition fees.Due to the same timing,I want to discontinue this subject now.
I know it’s hard for you to remove me from that course but I will definitely join this in next term.I am not a person who is not interested in this subject but my circumstances do not allow me to do this.I am a hard working student that never want to loose marks in the study because I came here in this institution for the sake of good teaching and learning.
This is happened with me first time in my career to choose job over study. You are more educated and experienced than me that’s why I just want to get your advice regarding this situation.
I will be waiting to hear back from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Ram.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the situation regarding your work-study conflict, state your intention to defer to the next term, and ask for advice. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear sir' should ideally be 'Dear Sir or Madam' or 'Dear [Name]'. The ideas are relevant and the purpose of the letter is clear throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that the explanation of your situation is slightly more concise to allow for a more sophisticated development of the request for advice.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'That’s why' and 'Due to the same timing', although these are sometimes used repetitively or in a slightly mechanical way. The progression of ideas is easy to follow from the explanation of the problem to the proposed solution and the final request for guidance. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that transitions between sentences feel more natural rather than relying on simple conjunctions.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'discontinue', 'circumstances', and 'tuition fees'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'causing me really hard' (should be 'causing me great difficulty') and 'loose marks' (should be 'lose marks'). The phrasing 'This is happened with me' is also non-standard. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over common collocations and verb forms to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including missing articles ('started the job', 'in next term'), incorrect verb tenses ('This is happened'), and punctuation issues (missing spaces after commas). While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures while reducing these minor errors will significantly improve your score in this criterion.
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