Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 5.5)

I found out that i have enrolled in evening class of my supply chain course in MacEwan University which i want to change for next term because recently i got promotion in my work and i promoted as a manager post in my work so i need to give everyday atleast 8 hours to my workplace because now as a manager i have more tasks to do from opening the store to assigning hours and schedule to my staff. however i am available on evening's for classes but i see no classes scheduled on that time and i checked for online classes also but it is not available for my course so please give me advised how i can complete my classes without disturbing my work schedule and if i complete that in next term will i am eligible to take the course in next term as right now i don't see any option left.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining the situation, stating your desire to defer, and asking for advice. However, the response is written as a single, long, run-on sentence. This lack of structure makes the tone feel informal and somewhat frantic, which is not ideal for a formal letter to an educational institution. To improve, you should clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs: an opening statement of purpose, a body paragraph explaining your work situation, and a concluding paragraph requesting specific advice. While the content covers the requirements, the lack of formal structure limits the effectiveness of your communication.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing entirely, which is a significant issue for coherence. The text is essentially one long, rambling sentence. While you use some linking words like 'however' and 'because', the absence of punctuation (such as periods to separate thoughts) makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you must use full stops to separate independent clauses and organize your letter into a standard formal format: salutation, introduction, body, and closing. The current lack of logical segmentation makes the text feel mechanical and difficult to read.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks the precision expected in a formal letter. For example, you use the word 'work' three times in the first few lines. Phrases like 'give everyday atleast 8 hours' are slightly unnatural; a more formal collocation would be 'dedicate at least eight hours daily'. You also use 'give me advised' instead of 'give me advice'. While your meaning is clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation that prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is the weakest area of your response. The entire text is a single run-on sentence, which is a major grammatical error. There is a consistent lack of punctuation, and you frequently omit necessary articles (e.g., 'in evening class' should be 'in an evening class'). You also have issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'i promoted as a manager' (should be 'I was promoted') and 'will i am eligible' (should be 'would I be eligible'). You rely almost exclusively on simple structures, and the lack of sentence boundaries makes it difficult to assess your control over complex grammar.

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