Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.
explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course
say what you would like to do about your studies
ask for advice about what you can do about the situation
Student answer (Band 4.5)
I have enrolled in evening course but I might be to busy to continue the for taking the scheduled and I would love to take the course the next term because I have to prioritze my needs specially in my financia problem. I have to sacrifice for this year on my plan for school to make my problem on my needs to be deal with it.
On one hand, studies is very important for me and also to everyone who has dream in the good life in the futre. I would like to do better when the time will come for the study by next couple of a year. I have to continue my studies when the time I achieve my goal to support my self
On my situation as of now, I'd rather to concentrate on my situation looking a money to support my financial problem for the next school year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the prompt, but the execution is severely hindered by unclear phrasing. The student explains that they are too busy due to financial problems ("I might be to busy to continue the for taking the scheduled... because I have to prioritze my needs specially in my financia problem"), states a desire to take the course next term ("I would love to take the course the next term"), and vaguely gestures toward asking for advice, though this is muddled. While all bullet points are touched upon, the ideas are underdeveloped and the lack of clarity prevents the response from fully conveying the intended message. Consequently, this falls under Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially and the position and ideas are obscured by language breakdowns.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response shows a basic attempt at paragraphing, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. The student uses some basic cohesive links such as 'On one hand' and 'On my situation as of now', but these are often misused or structurally flawed, creating a mechanical and confusing flow. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly with pronouns and dangling modifiers like 'make my problem on my needs to be deal with it'. There is no clear overall progression of thought, and sentences often read as isolated fragments rather than part of a cohesive letter. This performance aligns with Band 4 in terms of organization and cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect, severely straining the reader's comprehension. The student uses terms incorrectly or invents non-standard phrases, such as 'financia problem', 'prioritze', and 'looking a money'. There are multiple spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication throughout the text (e.g., 'to busy' instead of 'too busy', 'good life in the futre'). Because the lexical range is extremely limited and errors constantly cause difficulty for the reader, this merits a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures and persistent, frequent errors that distort meaning. The student attempts complex sentences, but they are almost entirely faulty and incoherent, such as 'I have to sacrifice for this year on my plan for school to make my problem on my needs to be deal with it.' Basic sentence boundaries, verb forms, and prepositional phrases are frequently incorrect ('continue the for taking', 'when the time will come for the study'). Errors are so frequent and pervasive that they constantly impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.
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