Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my concern regarding course which i have already been enrolled. Basically, my father want to take MDCAT test instead of this course. Due to the fact that, I am extremely busy with my preparations. Therefore, I could not attend classes due to immediate orders of my father.

Another factor is that, I can not attend lectures online due to distortion of internet in my area. However, I would like to take the course in the next term. At that time, I will be availabe physically in department. Currently, I am extremely in stress and could not take immediate action. So, I need your advice what should i do? As a instructor, you can provide me better suggestion and guidance regarding future.Definitely, I will wait for your response. I shall be very grateful to you for this kind of act.

Yours sincerely,

Parvez iqbal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you explain that preparation for the MDCAT and your father’s instructions prevent you from attending, state that you want to take the course next term, and ask the instructor for advice. The request is understandable and the letter is appropriately directed to a course representative. However, some points are less fully explained than others. For example, “I will be available physically in department” does not clearly explain why next term will be more suitable, and the request for advice could specify practical options, such as deferring enrolment or transferring fees. Clarifying your own circumstances and the action you hope the instructor can take would make the purpose more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: it introduces the problem, gives further reasons, states a preferred plan, and closes with a request. Connectors such as “However” and “Therefore” help signal relationships between ideas. At times, though, the links feel mechanical or do not accurately express the relationship: “Therefore” is followed by a repeated explanation of non-attendance, while “Another factor” introduces internet access without clearly connecting it to the main reason. The ideas would progress more smoothly if grouped into clear paragraphs—for example, one explaining the circumstances and another setting out the requested deferral and advice. The final section also moves quickly between stress, advice, gratitude, and waiting for a response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main situation, including “preparations,” “attend classes,” “next term,” and “guidance.” There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “express my concern” and “I shall be very grateful.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for this context, including “immediate orders,” “distortion of internet,” and “extremely in stress.” Spelling and word-form slips such as “availabe” and “instructor” used where “course instructor” would be clearer also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and precise administrative language, such as explaining that you are unable to continue and asking whether your enrolment can be deferred.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the reason clause “Due to the fact that…” and the contrast introduced by “However.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across the letter. Examples include “my father want” instead of “my father wants,” “regarding course” without an article, and “I need your advice what should i do?” which needs a clearer clause structure and question punctuation. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “i.” To improve, check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and form indirect questions correctly—for example, “I would appreciate your advice on what I should do.”

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