Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Respected Sir/mam,

Subject; Switch the Course for next term.

It is stated that, I have been enrolled for evening course Since five days. However, A big blow happened in my life,My mom has suddenly sick. she had cerebral stroke, she has been admitted in hospital.My elder brother is also busy in work.So, No family member are there in hospital to take care else me. I would like to spend some time with my mom. Once, she recover properly, I want to resume my cource study.Meanwhile , I will take some help from google and chat GPT. and I will cover all of my Course study.

Once, My mom will dischaged from hospital . i will continue my evening session course.

Hoping , you will undersatand my compulsion , and waiting for your positive back.

Thank you for your kind Anticipation and kindness.

your obediently

Imtiaz Hussain

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You explain the main circumstance clearly: your mother has had a stroke, is in hospital, and you need to care for her because your brother is busy. You also indicate that you want to resume the course next term. However, the request is only partly complete: you do not directly ask the course provider for advice about available options, such as deferring enrolment or keeping your place. The plan to use Google and ChatGPT does not explain what you want the institution to do. The response is also four words below the required minimum, and the very brief treatment of the requested arrangements leaves the letter under-developed. State your request explicitly and add a relevant question about the procedure or any fees.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas follow a broadly understandable order: you introduce your enrolment, explain the family emergency, describe your intended study plan, and close with a request for understanding. Time markers such as “Once” and “Meanwhile” help show the sequence. However, the letter is presented as one block, so the reason, proposed arrangement, and request are not clearly separated. Some links are awkward or repetitive, particularly the repeated statements that you will continue the course after your mother leaves hospital. Organise the message into short paragraphs and use transitions to distinguish the immediate situation from your request for next term. This would make the progression clearer and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “evening course,” “cerebral stroke,” “hospital,” and “resume.” The reader can generally understand the central message, but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural or unclear. For example, “A big blow happened in my life” is an awkward way to introduce the emergency, while “positive back” does not clearly express the response you hope to receive. Spelling and word-form errors such as “cource,” “dischaged,” and “undersatand” also reduce accuracy. Choose conventional formal-letter expressions and check spelling carefully; this will make your meaning easier to follow and your tone more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas with longer sentences, for example, “My elder brother is also busy in work. So, No family member are there in hospital to take care else me,” but these structures are often inaccurate. Errors include subject–verb agreement (“No family member are”), tense and verb forms (“Once, she recover” and “will dischaged”), and sentence boundaries and capitalisation (“My mom has suddenly sick. she had…”). Most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the attempted complex clauses are not consistently controlled. Practise accurate past and future forms, agreement, and sentence punctuation. For instance, use a clear past-tense account of the emergency followed by a direct, grammatically complete request about deferring the course.

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