Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear mr. smith,

I am writing this letter to inform you that nowadays i am busy in my work due to which cannot continue my personal support worker course .

Actually, i got a job as a amazon worker and they offered me evening shift . owing to it is challening for me to handle both things . So i decided to continue my job first which help me to stable fiancially.

Apart from this, I want to enroll for next term as this course is very essential to build my career in health care.

I requested to you that what can I do for this situation . Please give me adive should this decision is good for me or should I Continue my course.And what would be the process of defer my course. I would wait for your respone.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

your sincerly,

jon

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three points: you explain that an evening shift at your new job prevents you from continuing, state that you want to enrol next term, and ask about both the decision and the deferral process. The purpose is clear and the details about financial stability and your healthcare career make the situation relevant. The request for advice is present, although “should this decision is good for me” is unclear, and the letter does not specify whether you are asking the course provider to defer your place or simply seeking guidance. To strengthen the response, make the requested action explicit and develop the advice request more clearly, for example by asking what options are available and whether your enrolment can be transferred to next term. The main ideas are relevant, but some are not fully explained.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a generally sensible order: you introduce the problem, explain the new work commitment, state your plan for next term, and finish by asking for advice. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking phrases such as “Actually” and “Apart from this” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, some connections are awkward or mechanical, particularly “owing to it is challenging” and the sequence of questions in the final paragraph. The reader can follow the overall message, but the request would be easier to process if you separated the advice question from the question about deferring the course. Use clearer transitions and ensure each paragraph has one main purpose to make the progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “evening shift,” “financially,” “enroll,” “career,” and “defer,” so the main message is understandable. There is also an attempt to use more formal expressions such as “time and consideration.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “challening,” “fiancially,” “adive,” and “respone.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “continue my job first” and “process of defer my course.” Choose more accurate collocations, for example “prioritise my job” and “the process for deferring my course.” Proofreading spelling and using standard course-administration vocabulary would make the letter more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at longer structures, such as “I am writing this letter to inform you that…” and “as this course is very essential to build my career.” However, the longer constructions are often faulty, and errors in sentence structure and verb forms sometimes make the request difficult to understand. For example, “due to which cannot continue” lacks a clear subject, while “should this decision is good for me” uses an incorrect question structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “a amazon worker” and the run-together final questions. Practise forming indirect questions and checking that each clause has a subject and a correctly formed verb.

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