Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Madam,

I am writing to inform you about my new change of work over the weekend that affected my evening class which I enrolled last week.

I am considering the new offer that was given to me in the office of the Care giver in my nursing field, no longer be available to attend the evening class as planned with you.

please, could you make some provision to put me in a new season, probably in the morning hour in the new term because of the little shift in my office.

I wish to ask for help any way you can to take me through the courses which involves more concentration.

I will be very glad if my request is considered favourably or any suggestions that will be beneficial to learn appropriately next term, looking at my performance last month wast too wonderful, advice better ways to go about it please Madam, because alot of information is coming to my mind now.

Thank you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the main points: you explain that a change in work affects your ability to attend, request a place in a later term, and ask for advice. The request for a morning class also gives the reader a practical option. However, some details are unclear or only briefly developed. For example, “new change of work over the weekend” does not explain precisely what changed, and “little shift in my office” leaves the new schedule uncertain. Your request for help with the courses is also broad. To make the letter more complete, state your work hours, clearly ask whether your enrolment can be deferred, and specify what advice you need about continuing your studies.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce the problem, make a request, and close politely. This gives it an overall arrangement that the reader can follow. However, the progression is weakened by the long, crowded paragraph beginning “I will be very glad,” which combines your request, a comment on past performance, and a request for advice without clear separation. The connection between your work change and the proposed morning class is also not fully explained. Use separate paragraphs for the situation, your preferred arrangement, and your request for guidance. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between ideas would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for a formal course-related letter, including “evening class,” “new term,” “request,” and “suggestions.” These choices help communicate the general purpose. However, several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “new change of work,” “new season,” and “take me through the courses,” so the reader has to infer your meaning. “Care giver” and “alot” also show spelling or word-form control issues. Aim for standard expressions such as “change in my work schedule,” “next term,” and “provide guidance with the coursework.” More precise vocabulary would help you explain the circumstances and your preferred solution clearly while maintaining a suitable formal tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main purpose remains understandable. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or difficult to control. For instance, “I am considering the new offer …, no longer be available to attend” does not form a complete, grammatically connected statement; it needs a clear subject and verb structure, such as “Because I have accepted a new role, I will no longer be able to attend.” The sentence beginning “I will be very glad” also runs several ideas together, and “which involves” does not agree with the plural “courses.” Review clause construction, subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. Shorter, complete sentences would improve accuracy while you build confidence with complex forms.

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