Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to an evening course that I recently enrolled in but is now thinking to take it to next term as I am too busy during evenings to continue this time.

Currently, I am working at a restaurant in evening shifts and will not find myself time to attend lecturs during same time period. Additionally, I spoke to my manager regarding schedule change but he denied my request explaining lack of staff situation. Moreover, I won't be able to quit this job immediately because I am in an immense need of money this time to cover my household expenses.

After considering all the aspects, I thought to take the course to next term because it would be easy for me to earn and save money for now. However, later having money in my bank account will lessen my stress to manage expenses and allow me to concentrate fully on studies.

It would be great if you could provide me your valuable advise on this matter. I am very confused and not able to make a confident decision on this as I want to work and study both for now. Please guide me if there is any alternate solution to this.

I am looking forward for your advise and hope to hear from you soon!

Yours sincerely,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three points clearly: you explain that evening restaurant shifts prevent attendance, state that you would prefer to defer the course until next term, and ask the recipient for advice about alternatives. The reasons for your situation are relevant and supported with details, including your manager’s refusal to change the schedule and your need to cover household expenses. Your preference to study later is also explained through the prospect of saving money and reducing stress. To make the letter more fully developed, clarify whether you are formally requesting a deferral or asking the recipient to help you decide, since the letter expresses both intentions. A more direct statement of the action you want the course provider to take would strengthen the purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: the opening introduces the problem, the next paragraphs explain your work and financial circumstances, and the final paragraph asks for guidance. Paragraphing is appropriate, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Moreover,” and “However” help connect ideas. The sequence is generally easy to follow, although several transitions feel formulaic, and “After considering all the aspects” does not connect as naturally as a more direct transition would. The final two sentences repeat the request for advice. You could improve cohesion by making the relationship between your preference to defer and your request for advice more explicit, then ending with one concise, specific request.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for explaining the situation, and phrases such as “schedule change,” “household expenses,” and “concentrate fully on studies” communicate relevant details. You also attempt more formal expressions, including “with regard to” and “provide me your valuable advice,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural. For example, “take the course to next term” and “find myself time” do not express the intended meaning idiomatically; “defer the course until next term” and “find time to attend” would be clearer. There are also spelling errors in “lecturs” and “advise” when you mean the noun “advice.” Aim for natural collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “but,” and “explaining.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. In the opening, “I recently enrolled in but is now thinking” shifts from the writer to the course and has an unclear structure; write, for example, “I recently enrolled in an evening course, but I am now considering taking it next term.” In “I spoke to my manager … but he denied my request,” the tense is understandable, though “refused” is a more suitable word choice rather than a grammar correction. Other grammar issues include “will not find myself time” and “looking forward for your advice”; use “will not have time” and “looking forward to your advice.” More accurate sentence patterns and prepositions would improve control.

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