Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Respected sir or ma'am

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to inform you regarding evening course that I was planning to enrolled in it. However, I am unable to join this this course due to personal and professional reasons.Firstly, I have ample of responsibilities of my home and I have to pay my younger brother education fees this year as my father passed away few months ago.Due to this reason, I have to do some additional hours. Moreover,I have so many additional shift because of festival seasons.

In addition to this, I have keen interest in this course and I would not like to cancel this course.Therefore, you can postpone my course and defer me in next intect that would be really helpful for me instead of cancel it.When I join this course in next term it would be manageable schedule.

Lastly, I just want to know please let me know is there any alternative option for me that would be best advice for me to make wise decision regarding course, I am hoping for the best response. Thank you for valuable time and assistance.

your regards ,

Jahanvi Master

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points: you explain that family responsibilities and extra work shifts prevent you from continuing, state that you want to defer rather than cancel, and ask for advice about alternatives. The reason is supported with relevant detail, including your father’s death and your brother’s education fees, and your intention to resume next term is clear. This gives the letter a clear purpose and position. To make the response more fully developed, specify the course or term more precisely and explain what practical advice you need—for example, whether a deferral is possible, whether fees can be transferred, or what procedure to follow. The request is present, but its options remain general.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a sensible progression: opening and explanation, your preferred arrangement, then a request for advice and a closing. Connectors such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” “In addition to this,” and “Therefore” help signal how the points relate, and the reader can follow your overall purpose. However, the transitions sometimes feel formulaic, and several ideas are crowded into long sentences, particularly the final request. Paragraphing would make the stages of the letter clearer: separate the explanation from your request to defer and your question about alternatives. Use pronouns and linking phrases carefully so each reference is unmistakable, and avoid stacking several connectors where a direct sentence would create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal letter, including “responsibilities,” “additional hours,” “defer,” “alternative option,” and “assistance.” These choices communicate the main situation and show an attempt to use language suited to the purpose. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, however, such as “ample of responsibilities,” “additional shift,” and “next intect.” “I have keen interest” also needs a more natural expression. These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and polish. Aim to learn common phrases for course administration and employment, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause with “as my father passed away” and a conditional time reference beginning “When I join this course.” The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “I was planning to enrolled” uses the wrong verb form, while “I have to pay my younger brother education fees” needs a possessive form. The opening also has an incomplete or awkward construction: “I was planning to enrolled in it.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, especially where full stops run into the next sentence. Practise accurate verb patterns, articles and possessives, and divide the long final sentence into shorter, controlled sentences.

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