Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about taking out my name from then part time course due to my hectic schedule. Instead, i wolud prefer to continue my classes next year.

As a captain of college's hockey team, we are preparing for Asian hockey championship, which is going to be in Decemeber of this year. This tournamet is really important for my college and everyday evening, i have to go for a practice session.

Being a student, i will definately attend my regular classes. I will try to finish all of my assigments before deadline and with dedication. Furthermore, i am also preparing for my mid terms exam and ptracticals.

Is there any penalty for postponding classes? Apart from this, please suggest me that the same course will be part of our curriculum nex year or not .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the main points: you explain that evening hockey practice for an important championship conflicts with the course, say you would prefer to continue next year, and ask about postponement and whether the course will remain available. The reason for your absence is relevant and understandable. However, the request to take the course next term is not stated consistently: “next year” may not mean next term, and you do not clearly ask how to transfer or defer your enrolment. Your plans to attend regular classes and complete assignments are less directly relevant and could be replaced with more detail about your preferred arrangement. The response is also 9 words below the required minimum, so add a little relevant detail to complete the task fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you state your purpose, explain the hockey commitment, describe your studies, and finish with questions. Paragraphing helps separate these points, and linking expressions such as “Instead” and “Furthermore” make the relationships between ideas clear. This organisation is effective, though the paragraph about regular classes, assignments and exams interrupts the central explanation of why you need to defer the course. The final questions would also be easier to follow if they were grouped into a direct request for advice about the next steps. To strengthen progression further, keep each paragraph focused on one purpose and use clearer links between your reason for leaving and your proposed plan.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a formal letter, including “hectic schedule,” “championship,” “practice session,” and “penalty.” These choices communicate the situation and show some variety beyond basic wording. However, several spelling errors—“wolud,” “Decemeber,” “tournamet,” “definately,” “assigments,” “ptracticals,” and “postponding”—are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Some phrases are also not quite natural for this context: “taking out my name from” and “continue my classes” do not express course deferral as precisely as they could. Aim for accurate spelling and conventional administrative expressions, such as asking to defer or postpone enrolment. This would make your vocabulary more precise and appropriate to the formal purpose.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and more developed structures, including the reason clause in “due to my hectic schedule” and the relative clause in “which is going to be in December of this year.” Most of the message remains understandable, and the questions at the end show an attempt to address the reader directly. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “As a captain of college’s hockey team, we are preparing,” the opening phrase does not match the subject “we”; write, for example, “As captain of my college’s hockey team, I am preparing.” The sentence beginning “Being a student” also has an unclear relationship to the main clause. Check articles, possessives, and sentence boundaries, and use consistent capitalisation for “I.”

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