Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have enrolled in an evening course but you have found that you are too busy to continue and would like to take the course next term instead.

• explain the situation and why you cannot continue the course

• say what you would like to do about your studies

• ask for advice about what you can do about the situation

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to let you know that I have registered for an evening batch program. My enrollment ID is: NU[redacted phone]. Unfortunately, I want to extend this course because of busy schedule.

Recently, Apotex company hired me as a full-time co-op student. Due to my busy schedule, I am feeling tired. As a result, I could not concentrate on the concepts. Therefore, I decided to complete this course after completing my co-op in the next semester.

I am thinking of putting in my whole effort and achieving 1st position in the class. Therefore, I would prefer to join the same course in the next term. If you have any alternative option in this circumstance, please guide me. Also, please explain the procedure for postponing the course. Do I have to pay the tuition fees again, or can I get a refund for this term?

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your feedback.

Yours faithfully,

Almas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The letter addresses all three points clearly: you explain that a full-time co-op role has made it difficult to continue, state that you would like to take the same course next term, and ask for advice about postponement, fees, and a possible refund. The explanation that tiredness affects your concentration gives relevant support, and the request for guidance is appropriately direct. To make the response more fully developed, clarify whether you are asking to defer your current enrolment or withdraw and re-enrol, since “extend this course” does not precisely express the intended action. You could also explain briefly when your co-op ends or why the next term will be more manageable. Overall, the purpose and position remain clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a sensible sequence: you identify your enrolment, explain the change in circumstances, describe your preferred plan, and finish with practical questions. Paragraphing separates the explanation from the request, while links such as “As a result,” “Therefore,” and “Also” help show relationships between ideas. The progression is clear, although several transitions are used in a somewhat formulaic way, particularly the repeated “Therefore.” The opening paragraph could also connect the course situation more directly to the later explanation of your co-op work. For smoother cohesion, vary the linking language and use a clear reference such as “this arrangement” when referring back to the proposed deferral.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes relevant terms such as “full-time co-op student,” “concentrate,” “alternative option,” and “procedure for postponing.” These choices make the situation and your questions understandable. However, some expressions are imprecise or do not collocate naturally: “extend this course” suggests making it longer rather than taking it later, and “evening batch program” is less natural in this context. “Putting in my whole effort” and “achieving 1st position” also sound overly ambitious or awkward for a formal administrative letter. Aim for more precise, natural phrasing, such as “defer my enrolment” and “give the course my full attention.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the cause-and-effect construction “Due to my busy schedule, I am feeling tired. As a result, I could not concentrate…” and the conditional question “Do I have to pay… or can I get a refund…?” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and the closing is appropriately formed. Some grammatical choices are less controlled: “I am writing this letter to let you know that I have registered” shifts into a present-perfect construction where a simple past may fit better, and “I could not concentrate” does not align smoothly with the present-tense “I am feeling tired.” The colon after “ID” is also unnecessary. More consistent tense choices and a wider range of accurately controlled complex sentences would strengthen the writing.

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