Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Serious illnesses are caused by smoked and it should be announced as illegal. I am totally agree with this statment and I will discuss this in the upcoming paragraph with relevant example.

Having a smoke is the bad habit for a person as it aslo proved by sctientists that the person who consume the smoke and when person exhale the smoke in the air as it is harmful for others too.

Because of exhaling smoke, it realses harmful chemicals which directly effects the lungs of human who are not consuming smoke. As, it is also proved that the people who are not consuming the smoke are more badly effected by the person who are taking it.

Serious illnesse are caused due to smoking such as lungs cancer, throat cancer, breathing problems and such other issuses related to skin problem. Even, it is written on smoking products that taking these substances can harmful to body and lead cause lungs cancer then aslo people consuming it. It should be banned and offically made as illegal subtance so people think before buy it and should be fined those person who are selling and buying from the markets. While doing this, it is really hepful for those are consuming it as it will easy to them breath fresh air without any chemical substances present in the air because exhale air of air as it is cause of trouble breathing issues.

To conclude, smoking is the reason for a serious illnesses such as lungs cancer and breathing issues. And, it should be banned and made a illegal from the market to save people life and i there are number of increasing death from last five years due to somking which main caudes of lungs cancers .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: “I am totally agree” indicates strong agreement, and the conclusion repeats that smoking should be banned. You give relevant reasons, including harm to non-smokers through second-hand smoke and illnesses such as lung and throat cancer, and you explain that a ban could discourage sales and use. This addresses the main question. However, some points are asserted rather than developed: the claim that non-smokers are “more badly effected” is not explained or supported, and the reference to rising deaths over the last five years appears only at the end. Develop one or two reasons with a specific example and explain how they support making smoking illegal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs about second-hand smoke and illness, and a conclusion. The ideas are generally relevant and the reader can follow the broad argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several links feel mechanical or confusing. For example, the sentence beginning “Because of exhaling smoke” does not connect smoothly to the following claim, while “While doing this” has an unclear reference. Repeated use of “as” and “and” also makes relationships between ideas difficult to track. Give each body paragraph one clear focus, use explicit links such as “Furthermore” or “As a result” only where they fit, and make pronouns and references precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “harmful chemicals,” “lungs,” “cancer,” and “illegal,” so the main subject is clear. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “exhale the smoke” and “breathing problems.” However, vocabulary is often repetitive, and inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “smoked” for “smoking,” “announced as illegal,” “illegal subtance,” and “lungs cancer.” Several spellings, including “statment,” “sctientists,” and “somking,” also need attention. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; this will make your argument more precise and easier to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with subordinate clauses, for example, “Because of exhaling smoke, it realses harmful chemicals which directly effects the lungs.” This shows an effort to connect causes and consequences, but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur in examples such as “I am totally agree,” “the person who consume,” and “it should be banned and made a illegal.” Some long sentences combine several ideas without clear grammatical links, particularly the sentence beginning “While doing this.” Practise accurate basic patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and a correctly formed supporting clause. Check subject–verb agreement and articles during revision.

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