Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Smoking is injurious to health and it should be banned by the government. This habit causes more health issues but people become accustomed to consume it to gain necotine which helps them to feel relax in tough circumstances. Although it has some advantages in terms of relaxation and concentration, I firmly beleive its disadvantages, especially, lungs cancer, heart attacks, and mouth cancer are outweigh and authorities should take a strict actions against it.

On the one hand, people have become addicted to smoking because they have thoughts that smoking helps them to feel relax and concentrate efficiently. For example, mostly youth are in depression due to the unemployment, sadden up responsibilities at home and relationships failure. So, they adopt this habit to feel relax and think clearly in that kind of situations. As a result, the ratio of this habit is enormously increasing day-by-day.

In contrast, this habit causes more serious health issues like cancer. A recent research of the Dr. Alison demonstrated that the cases of the lungs cancer are rising continously daily in both men and women nearly 4 patients in a day. People adopt this trend, particularly cigarrate, and marijuana to look cool in front of their friend. Government should stop this trend by promulgating of its drawbacks. Health centres should start awareness campaign and these kind of drugs should be made illegal. Because, health is far important. He

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position in favour of banning smoking, and you give relevant reasons, including addiction, perceived relaxation, and serious illnesses. However, the response only partially develops the task: the benefits are briefly acknowledged, while the case for making smoking illegal is not fully explained. The example about youth experiencing unemployment or relationship problems is general, and the claim about a doctor’s research lacks enough detail to make it convincing. The final recommendation to use awareness campaigns and make drugs illegal is relevant, but the response ends abruptly. The required minimum of 250 words is not met, which limits the space available to develop your reasons and examples. Explain how a ban could reduce harm and address possible objections to strengthen your response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting why people smoke, and a contrasting paragraph about health risks and government action. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “In contrast,” and “As a result” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is uneven: the first body paragraph focuses on reasons people smoke, while the second combines health evidence, social image, government policy, and awareness campaigns without clearly connecting each point. Some links are awkward or incomplete, particularly “Because, health is far important,” and the final “He” leaves the ending unfinished. Group related points into clearer paragraphs and use references that make the connection between claims explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “addicted,” “unemployment,” “concentration,” “health issues,” and “awareness campaign.” These choices make the subject clear, and you attempt more formal language such as “promulgating.” However, several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, including “sadden up responsibilities,” “feel relax,” and “the ratio of this habit.” Spelling errors such as “necotine,” “beleive,” “continously,” and “cigarrate” are also noticeable. Aim for precise, natural combinations rather than more elaborate wording: for example, describe people as “under pressure from family responsibilities” and say that smoking “helps them relax.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession beginning “Although” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “As a result.” This shows some range, but complex structures are often not controlled accurately, and errors sometimes make the meaning harder to follow. Examples include “people become accustomed to consume it,” “its disadvantages … are outweigh,” and “authorities should take a strict actions.” There are also problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation: “Because, health is far important” is an incomplete sentence, and the response ends with the fragment “He.” Practise accurate verb patterns, agreement, articles, and complete sentence construction. Shorter, carefully checked sentences would help you express your ideas more reliably.

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