Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

few people assert that smoking injuries are very harmful in physical life.meanwhile, others deem that smoking is an excellent habit in their lifestyle.In my personal opinion Smoking kill the life for human body and their family happiness. This essay is about smoking serious illnesses and smoking illegal.

I personally never support smoking any products because my family has suffered bad experiences in the past. My father has a bad habit of smoking.one day he was huge cough in their body .my family worried about their physical health at that time doctor call me and say your father detected lung cancer .my family so surprised and shocked.we never understand what we would do for them. finally one day my family lost my father. therefore, in my personal things the smoking ban for my country.

secondly, I will discuss smoking damage next generation growth,skills and physical human body.Smoking creates air pollution.people live in metropolitan areas. they think about smoking help for develop their life style but think about any bad habits that never change your lifestyle. they change only body stamina & reduce your spam count .so that is also one reason smoking is made illegal.

At the end of this topic write my final thoughts in my mind The authority change few rules about smoking in parking,public places and school area.one more thinks, every school take one class for student learn about how many losses smoking and cause serious illnesses.finally, I personally support about state authority discussion about reduce air pollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you provide a personal anecdote about your father, the second body paragraph lacks depth and relies on generalizations about 'body stamina' and 'spam count' (likely meaning sperm count), which are not clearly explained. The conclusion introduces new suggestions (school classes) rather than summarizing the main points. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly relates to the prompt's requirement to discuss whether smoking should be made illegal.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression between ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'finally one day my family lost my father' or the confusing start to the second paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow of ideas within paragraphs is hindered by repetitive sentence structures. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother narrative.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally basic and sometimes imprecise. There are several instances where word choice is awkward or incorrect, such as 'smoking injuries are very harmful in physical life' and 'smoking kill the life for human body'. The term 'spam count' is likely a misuse of 'sperm count'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of precision makes it difficult to convey your arguments effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid literal translations from your native language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'smoking kill'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are predominantly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Once these are consistent, try to incorporate more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences to demonstrate a wider range.

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