Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era, owing to the lack of parents supervision and bad friendship foster young generation to more incline towards detrimental habits: smoking wapes , drinking alcohol, and consuming marijuana. However, experts stated that smoking should be restricted as it causes severe negative effects on one's health. I am agree with this notion at large extent. The reasons will be elucidated in the ensuing paragraphs alongside suitable example.

To commence, there are several threats to someone's health if they are addicted by smoking. The first and foremost, the lungs will be directly damaged by inhaling smoke. In other words, this will lead to breathing problems which results in destroying the natural body. For example, AIMs registered plenty of cases of cancer just because of addiction of smoking. Although, there is no cure other than chemotherapy to cope with cancer. Moreover, this remedy has not been resulted with high percentage of success in surgery.

Apart from this, individuals have been wasting their savings to purchase extraordinary cigarettes in lieu of investing to somewhere else for better future as packs of wape are expensive. Another point is, passive smoking is also proven bad for others as it is more harmful than active smoking. Additionally, in the absence of cigarette, people those who addictive are found more aggressive and some feel depression. This develops a negative and rude personality of smoker.

On the other hand, growing number of smokers are demanding industries to produce immense stock. As a consequence, it has become more popular and contributed extenly to economy of countries. For an instance, the supply of raw materials like tobacco and paper has been surged significantly in China from India.

In conclusion, after analysing certain negatives of smoking one should be encouraged by governments or parents to do anything in limit will not be bother anyone's life. Henceforth, public should be more aware of bad impacts through campings rather than making smoking illegal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, though the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. You provide reasons for why smoking is harmful, such as health risks and financial costs, and you acknowledge the economic counter-argument. However, the conclusion is contradictory; you initially agree that smoking should be illegal, but then suggest that public awareness campaigns are preferable to a ban. This inconsistency weakens your overall position. To improve, ensure your conclusion directly reflects the stance taken in your introduction and provide more focused, logical support for your main arguments rather than introducing new, slightly tangential points like the supply chain in China.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'To commence', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand', to signal transitions. However, some of these are used mechanically or incorrectly, such as 'Henceforth' in the conclusion, which does not fit the context. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the connection between the government, parents, and the suggestion to 'do anything in limit' is confusing. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'detrimental', 'elucidated', and 'passive smoking'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and non-standard collocations, such as 'addicted by smoking' (should be 'addicted to'), 'extenly' (likely a misspelling of 'extensively'), and 'campings' (should be 'campaigns'). The term 'wapes' is also a misspelling of 'vapes'. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, the frequent errors in word formation and collocation prevent you from reaching a higher band score. Focus on learning words in context to ensure natural usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am agree' (should be 'I agree'), 'lack of parents supervision' (should be 'parental supervision'), and 'this remedy has not been resulted with' (should be 'this remedy has not resulted in'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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