Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, the inhalation of smoking is increasing day by day among people and it cause to very serious illness. I totally agree with this statement that smoking should be illegal. I will discuss my viewpoints in upcoming paragraphs.

To start with, here is a question that who encourage people to do smoking. First of all, the advertisement of these products. when people watch the advertisement in television, on social media and on newspaper, they want to try that product. Secondly, elders at home and in society teach children to do smoking. This is how , we all know that children learn what they see and they learn from their elders. so, if they smoke in front of their children, they are teaching them these bad habit indirectly. All these things should be stop that put the youngsters on a wrong path.

Moreover, Government should make strict rules for the people who smoke. For example, They should banned the smoking in the markets. If they see someone selling these products they should be prisoned and have fine of 10,000. Apart from this, government should aware generation about the advantages and bad effects of smoking on health through the advertisements, posters and many more ways. Also, in education centres teachers should teach the concerns of this, so the upcoming genetration do not follow the people who smoke.

To conclude, we should avoid the things that harm our health to live happy an healthy life. This can only happen if we all know the advantages and disadvantages of all the products we are eating.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that smoking should be illegal. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The arguments regarding advertising and the influence of elders are relevant but could be more deeply explored. The suggestion that government should ban smoking in markets and impose fines is a clear supporting point, but the essay lacks a more nuanced discussion of the practical implications or the 'extent' of the agreement. The conclusion is slightly off-topic, as it shifts focus to 'products we are eating' rather than summarizing the main argument about smoking. Overall, the response covers the requirements but lacks depth in argumentation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To start with', 'Moreover', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'This is how, we all know that'. Referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate for the task, and the progression of ideas is logical enough to follow without difficulty, despite some minor lapses in cohesive flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choice, such as 'inhalation of smoking is increasing' (instead of 'smoking prevalence is increasing') and 'government should aware generation' (instead of 'make the generation aware'). The student uses basic vocabulary throughout, and there is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated lexical items. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the repetitive nature of the language limit the score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'it cause to very serious illness' (subject-verb agreement and preposition error), 'They should banned' (incorrect verb form), and 'have fine of 10,000' (missing article). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and verb tense consistency is needed.

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