Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.
To what extent do you agree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In today,s world, smoking is a major concerns due to its detrimental health effects. Some argues that smoking should be made illegal. I strongly agree with this view. In this essay, i will explain reasons behind my opinion.
To Embarked with the reasons, why tabacco ought to be banned. the prominent one is life threatening illnesses, including cancers, heart and lungs disease, this condition affecting bones, eyes, and mental problems. Along with the smokers health, it make burden on healthcare systems. Moreover, smoking not only affects the individual who smoke but also non-smokers by secondhand smoke. For example, a survey conducted by healthcare service centre in 2024 revealed that 35% non smokers, including children and older people were facing serious illnesses because they living with smoke addicted person. As a result of this, smoking should be considered illegal.
However, Government must be take strict actions to preventing society from smoking. By implementing rules and regulations, the accessibility and attractiveness of smoking could be diminised. Besides of this, it helps to prevent future generation from this addictive habits of smoking. In addition, Authorities should aware the people about this harmful issues to make them active to support this prohibition.
In conclusion, There are multiple harmful impacts on society of smoking. Government should take this issue seriously and take timely action to address this from its roots
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. However, the response is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of development. While the main arguments regarding health risks and the burden on healthcare are relevant, they are somewhat brief. The conclusion is also quite abrupt. To improve, you should expand on your supporting points with more detailed explanations or additional examples to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement. The failure to meet the minimum word count significantly impacts the overall score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In conclusion'. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly awkward, such as 'To Embarked with the reasons', which is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the transition. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical. To reach a higher band, ensure that transitions are used accurately and that the relationships between sentences are more fluid and natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'make burden' instead of 'place a burden', and 'smoke addicted person' instead of 'addicted smoker'. You also use 'aware' as a verb in 'Authorities should aware the people', which is incorrect. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies in collocation prevent a higher score. Focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'In today,s world' (punctuation error), 'Some argues' (subject-verb agreement), 'Government must be take' (incorrect verb form), and 'they living with' (missing auxiliary verb). These errors are noticeable and occur frequently, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb tense usage, and basic punctuation. Proofreading your work for these common errors would be highly beneficial.
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