Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Task 2

Smoking is injurious to health can cause serious Health related issue thats why it should be banned in every country i am totally agree with this because smoking has only drawback you cannot expect any benefit from it.

Smoking produces major health issues we cannot under estimate them one of the major con is cancer heart disease and lungs damage

For example it destroys air sacs and tiny hairs leading to bad cough and breathing problems.

Trying to quit smoking feels different for each person but almost everyone will have some symptoms of nicotine withdrawal when you stop your body and brain have to get used to not having nicotine.

Another major risk is heart problems raises blood pressure which thickens the blood and makes heart attacks much more likely.

For example nicotine hooks the brain fast making it hard to stop.it should be banned in every country. In my country there no proper approach made to make it stop except printing a picture on cigarette box people see it na ignore no relevant approach made to stop this.

I have seen many smokers who cant resist them self from smoking despite its drawback they do not care about their health but later they suffer from major health issues at that time they could do nothing except regret

In conclusion smoking is death it has more drawbacks than benefits people only play with their liver through smoking.

I totally disagree with as it has not any benefit for you except illness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of banning smoking. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention health risks like cancer and heart disease, the explanation is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. The paragraph regarding nicotine withdrawal is only tangentially related to the argument for a legal ban. Furthermore, the conclusion contains a contradiction, stating 'I totally disagree with' when your essay clearly argues in favor of the ban. To improve, ensure your supporting points directly reinforce your stance and maintain consistency throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas; for example, the transition between the health risks and the personal anecdote about your country is abrupt. The use of punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and missing full stops, which makes the flow of ideas difficult to follow. To achieve a higher band, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in addition' to connect your arguments and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms such as 'major health issues' and 'drawbacks' multiple times. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'people only play with their liver,' which is not a standard English expression. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. Try to incorporate more precise terminology related to health and public policy to enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede readability. There is a significant lack of proper sentence structure, with many run-on sentences and missing punctuation (e.g., 'Smoking is injurious to health can cause serious Health related issue'). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex ideas are hindered by grammatical inaccuracies. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence punctuation, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for missing articles and pluralization errors.

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