Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I am totally agree to this statement that, smoking can cause severe health issues and it definitely made illegal. By making some rules and regulations on it's purchase we can stop the consumption of ciggrettes.

According to World Health Organization Tobbaco use and passive smoke cause 7 million deaths every year globally. Smoking also involving to cause numerous health related issues such as lungs cancer, mouth ulcer, lot of esophagal infections. Moreover, our younger generation are also now use to do smoking and considered it as a trend. This trend leads them towards severe health problems like stomach ulcer, anxiety, depression. Furthermore,despite of knowing the detrimental effects of smoking people still consuming tobacco at a very high level. The main reason to this issue is poor accountibilty towards the selling of tobbacco and its related drug family. Despite of knowing the severe impacts of this harmful product, it still selling on demand without any obstcle. Currently, tobacco selling is considered as a bussiness globally and a lot of people are earning from this. For instance, smoking cause nearly 70 to 90 percent people globally and cause 1.8 millions deaths every year.

Goverenment should take some serious actions against this issues by tracking the black sheeps who are prominantly involving in this chain. Government should make some rules and strict actions against shops, supermarkets which are considerably involve in selling cigrettes and related drugs. Additionally, selling these products to under age citizens also should be ban and whoever, try to break the law should be struckly punished.

With this, Goverenment should arrange and built some rehabilitation centers for those who are consuming tobacco and other drugs, Educational instituties should arrange some compaigns to spread the awareness against smoking and its detrimentsl impacts.

Conclusively, I am fully agree to this opinion that Tobacco consumption or smoking should be made illegal because it leads towards numerous health issues. And goverenment should apply strict laws and some seriouse action against it's selling and purchasing. By this way they can tackle this critical problem.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by taking a clear position that smoking should be made illegal and supporting it with reasons and examples, such as referencing the World Health Organization statistics on global deaths. The ideas are extended and supported, discussing health impacts and government accountability. However, there are instances of over-generalisation and slightly repetitive arguments regarding the sale of tobacco. The main position is maintained throughout the essay, fulfilling the requirements for a Band 6.5 or solid Band 6 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is divided into a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing health impacts and government solutions, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Additionally', although some transitions feel a bit mechanical. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate distinct ideas, such as moving from the health consequences to government interventions. However, referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression between sentences could be smoother to achieve higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for the topic, including terms like 'detrimental effects', 'rehabilitation centers', and 'accountability'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'ciggrettes', 'tobbaco', 'esophagal', 'accountibilty', and 'obstcle'. Phrases like 'smoking also involving to cause' and 'struckly punished' demonstrate limitations in word formation and collocation, placing this firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and conditional structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in the essay, including subject-verb agreement issues ('smoking also involving to cause', 'tobacco selling is... a lot of people are earning', 'selling these products... also should be ban'), preposition errors ('agree to this statement', 'reason to this issue'), and structural awkwardness ('I am totally agree'). These errors require some effort from the reader to interpret, though communication is generally maintained.

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