Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Smoking should be made illegal because of the illnesses that it couses. I agree with the statement and I really want smoking to be made illegal and banned in public places not not only to help smokers to quit smoking but also help non smoker from pasibe smoking.

Smoking is one of the mejor reason for cancer and other serious dieases and If can cause death. Science has proved that those who smoke, there lance and kidne get damege very quikly. Smoking not only damege phisicaly but also mentaly. If any person get addicted by smoking, it become very hard for them to quit. There are so many people dying every year with many diease causes by smoking.

Smoking in public places not only effects smokers but also other people around them. Secound hand smoking is also very common nowadays. So many people who do not smoke but get effected by the illness that smoking causes and doctors find out that pasive smoking is the main reason of that.

Smoking not only bed for humens but also for our environment. Our air is getting polluted day by day because of the smoke. Some people do not dispose the leftover cigarette in proper place and some time is cause fire.

In the end I want to say, smoking must be banned or illigal in every place. It is bad for our health and our environment. To stop people, gornment should take some step and try to help those people who wants to quit smoking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by taking a clear and consistent position in agreement with the statement that smoking should be made illegal. The writer presents relevant main ideas, such as the health consequences of smoking, second-hand smoke, and environmental damage. However, these ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed due to insufficient supporting detail and examples. For instance, the argument regarding environmental harm mentions that it causes fires sometimes, but this point is not fully extended. Furthermore, there are generalizations made throughout the essay without sufficient elaboration to reach a higher band. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, fitting the Band 5 descriptor well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at overall organization. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the logical flow between sentences is weak. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and sometimes repetitive manner, such as starting multiple paragraphs with 'Smoking not only...' or 'In the end I want to say'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing, while present, does not always manage relationships between ideas effectively. There is a lack of sophisticated transition phrases, leading to a mechanical feel in the overall structure. This performance aligns with a Band 5 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, frequently employing simple words like 'bad', 'help', and 'cause'. There are numerous spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'couses' for causes, 'mejor' for major, 'dieases' for diseases, 'lance' for lungs, 'kidne' for kidneys, 'damege' for damage, 'phisicaly' for physically, 'effects' for affects, 'secound' for second, 'bed' for bad, 'humens' for humans, 'illigal' for illegal, 'gornment' for government, and 'step' for steps. These noticeable errors and limited lexical range cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 4 level of lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but these attempts are frequently marred by basic grammatical and punctuation errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('those who smoke, there lance and kidne get damege'), fragment sentences ('If can cause death'), and preposition errors ('dying every year with many diease'). Complex structures are often faulty, and errors are frequent enough to cause significant difficulty and distraction for the reader. Control over basic grammatical rules is inconsistent. Consequently, the writing fits the Band 4 descriptors for grammatical range and accuracy.

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