Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal.

To what extent do you agree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Through different forms of print and digital media, we come across reports that at every extend smoking can prevent a death. It might be to the person who is smoking or to the person who is near by to them. At every extend I agree to this situation.

Starting with the first point, Smoking in injurious to your health. By this, I mean that smoking can kill people because it has a lot of tabaccoo. This can harm the people who are surrounding to them. In addition to that, Smoking can cause the enviroment by spreading the smoke of the cigrattee. In order to that, the air quality index (AQI) can also go high which is not good the enviroment.

Moreover, the goverment had already started improving this bad habit in to good. Goverment started selling nicotine cigrattee, which cause less harm to the body and to the enviroment because it has some organic ingredent like neem leaves, dry leaves.

Recently a researcher posted a report stated that from every 10 people, there are 2-3 persons and overall 13% in the whole world with dangerous health issue like Cancer. Even there were several youth they started the protest against smokling in public, due to health issue. In some areas like garden, near by to school the smoking should be prohibited because childrens are playing in the near by areas.

To conclude, down the lane, the smoking in the public should be strickly be avoided. While the Nicotine cigrattee should be started all around the world. So that, l

ess number of people be harmed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position agreeing that smoking should be made illegal ("At every extend I agree to this situation"). The writer attempts to support this stance with arguments regarding health risks, environmental pollution, and government alternatives. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. For instance, the reference to "nicotine cigrattee" containing "neem leaves" lacks logical integration with the argument that smoking should be banned. Furthermore, some arguments are repetitive or superficial. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of fully extended and well-developed supporting arguments places this response firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, and the writer attempts to use logical connectors such as "Starting with the first point," "In addition to that," and "To conclude." However, the overall organization suffers from awkward transitions and mechanical or misused cohesive devices, such as "In order to that" and "Recently a researcher posted a report stated that." Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas is disrupted by abrupt shifts between topics, such as moving from environmental pollution to government nicotine alternatives without a smooth bridge. Paragraphing is present but used somewhat simplistically, resulting in a Band 5 performance for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings and imprecise word choices throughout the text. Examples include "extend" instead of extent, "tabaccoo" for tobacco, "injurious" used appropriately but within a flawed sentence structure, "enviroment" for environment, "cigrattee" for cigarette, "ingredent" for ingredient, and "strickly" for strictly. While the writer attempts some less common words like "prohibited" and "organic," the persistent spelling errors and restricted range constrain the lexical score to Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors that impede understanding, such as "smoking can prevent a death" (which contradicts the intended meaning), "Smoking in injurious to your health," and "the goverment had already started improving this bad habit in to good." Other grammatical issues include missing articles, incorrect prepositions (e.g., "surrounding to them"), and tense inconsistencies. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, a Band 4 is appropriate.

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