Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
New neighbours have recently moved into the house/flat next door to where you live. You have examinations soon, but your neighbours play music late at night which is affecting your studies and sleep.
- explain what the problem is
- why it is causing you difficulties
- what action you would like them to take
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some people belive that it is better to work for a large organization, while others think that working for a small company is more beneficial. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
There is an ongoing debate about the workers who are working for the multinational firms or working in small organisations. Although some people believe that big corporations provide more career opportunities and job security, while small enterprises provide faster career growth and friendly working environment.
On the one hand, multinational companies provide more opportunities to the employees related to salaries, promotions and career growth, which can enhance the workers' skills for the intensive growth and also it provides a job security for the employees.Furthermore, if the workers work in big firms, they can also receive an attractive benefits, such as health insurance and pension plans. For instance, Amazon provides an intensive benefits to all the workers yearly. Therefore, working in large organisations provides more opportunities for the overall growth.
On the other hand, small firms provide more friendly working environment to all the workers, which can help the employees to work efficiently and with less stress. Although, small businesses have less financial resources, they provides a supportive work environment. Moreover, there are more opportunities for the promotions in small companies as there are limites staff with intensive skills, so it is more beneficial for the workers to get promotion easily. For instance, Tim Hortons provides more opportunities to the workers to get promoted. Thus, small corporations provide a supportive environment and more promotion opportunities.
To conclude, although, workers get more chances of promotion in small companies, i believe wo
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The task required a letter to a neighbour regarding a noise complaint, but the student wrote an essay discussing the advantages and disadvantages of working for large versus small companies. Because the response fails to address any of the bullet points or the context of the prompt, it cannot be assessed against the requirements of the task. It is a completely irrelevant response to the provided instructions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
While the essay structure itself is logical with clear paragraphing and the use of cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'Moreover', the content is entirely disconnected from the task. Within the context of the essay itself, the progression of ideas is clear, but the failure to address the prompt means the coherence is irrelevant to the actual task requirements.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for an essay format, using terms like 'multinational firms', 'career growth', and 'financial resources'. However, there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'intensive growth' and 'intensive benefits', which are not natural collocations. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the ideas of the essay, but it does not meet the specific needs of the requested letter-writing task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'some people belive' (spelling), 'the workers who are working' (redundancy), and 'they provides' (subject-verb agreement). While these errors do not generally impede the reader's understanding of the essay's content, they represent a lack of control over basic grammatical rules. The range of structures is sufficient for an essay, but the accuracy is inconsistent.
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