Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
New neighbours have recently moved into the house/flat next door to where you live. You have examinations soon, but your neighbours play music late at night which is affecting your studies and sleep.
- explain what the problem is
- why it is causing you difficulties
- what action you would like them to take
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The main problem is noise. Sometimes my neighbours play loud music at night. It spread many problem for me. My examination start soon I study at night but my neighbours play loud music. They create many problems for me. They disturbed my sleeping and study . I face many difficulties like when I trying to reading they play loud music and disturbed my sleeping. My first paper is biology which is start in august 23 it was difficult subject for me .I gave 12 class examination but in 11 class I fail in biology subject my parents and my siblings both teasing me and shame me. I face many difficuities in 11 class . I take big action for neighbour and ask to play light music at night because I study at night and after the study I go for sleeping but my neighbour play loud music.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: you explain the problem of loud music at night, why it affects you (disturbing your sleep and studies for your upcoming biology exam), and what action you want them to take (asking them to play light music). However, there is a penalty because the text falls short of the minimum 150-word requirement, containing only 147 words. Furthermore, you include some irrelevant personal details about your family teasing you from a previous class examination, which detracts slightly from the focus of the task. Because of the under-length penalty and the inclusion of tangential information, the task achievement score is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The writing lacks proper paragraphing and consists of a single block of text, which disrupts the logical flow and overall organization. There is a lack of cohesive devices, and ideas are often repeated rather than progressed smoothly (e.g., repeating 'they play loud music' and 'disturbed my sleeping and study'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and sentences follow one another without adequate transitional markers. While the general topic remains discernible, the lack of paragraph structure and limited cohesion keeps this criterion at a lower band.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as 'problem', 'play', 'study', and 'difficulties'. There are noticeable word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'It spread many problem for me', 'biology which is start in august 23', and 'I take big action for neighbour'. The range of vocabulary is narrow and barely adequate for the task, causing some difficulty for the reader due to awkward phrasing and imprecise lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are numerous tense and agreement issues throughout the text, such as 'My examination start soon', 'I study at night', 'when I trying to reading', and 'I fail in biology subject'. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences and missing periods. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning in several places.
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