Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I totally disgree with statement that zoo should be closed and animals do not need zoo. There are various reasons of my disagreement such as on verge of extinct and illegal hunting of animals.I will discuss this both factors with examples in following paragraphs.

One of my main reason of disapprovement is that there are various type of animals species that we already lost and only few are left.For example the most renowned animal TheZebra is most renowned animal is almost disappeared. I believe if we have enough zoo and facility to cake of animals then we can preserve them, care then and improve their growth. Well managed zoo can not only protect endangered animals , also help increase their population through breeding programmes.

Another major factors of my disgreement is illegal poaching of animals.This is due to to the fact that if there will be no zoo then animals will get no proper habitat to protect themselves from hunting. There are various type of animals that proves benefical for people like they use sheep for making wool clothes, Tigers for making decorative items and some traditional remedies. If animals will freely roam here and there people can kill then and use them for personal benefits.Therefore, there should be proper habitat for them to live and stay safely.

To conclude, Zoo should not be shut down completely as it is safest place for animals to live. I believe that we should conserve animals in zoo if we want their species to grow.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you disagree with closing zoos, and the conclusion restates that view. You also give two relevant reasons—protecting endangered species and providing safety from poaching—and include examples such as breeding programmes. However, the support is uneven. The conservation point is relevant but would benefit from a more accurate, specific example; the claim that zebras are “almost disappeared” is unclear and overgeneralised. The poaching paragraph also needs fuller explanation, especially how zoos specifically prevent hunting. The discussion of animals being used for wool, decorative items and remedies does not clearly support your case for keeping zoos. Develop the strongest reasons and connect each example directly to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a logical route through your argument, and phrases such as “One of my main reason” and “Another major factors” signal the paragraph topics. The conclusion also returns to your central position. To make the progression more effective, use linking and referencing more precisely: “this both factors” is unclear, and “This is due to the fact that” does not clearly identify the point it refers to. Some transitions feel formulaic, while the ideas within the poaching paragraph move from zoo habitats to human uses of animals without a clear connection. Explain that link or remove the unrelated detail.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “endangered animals,” “illegal poaching,” “habitat,” “preserve,” and “breeding programmes.” These choices show some range beyond basic language. However, noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation problems reduce precision: “disgree,” “disapprovement,” “cake of animals,” and “benefical” make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. There is also repetition, particularly “renowned animal” in the zebra example, and some expressions are not natural, such as “animals will freely roam here and there.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for conservation and protection would help you express your ideas clearly and avoid relying on repeated general words such as “animals” and “people.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer structures, including “if we have enough zoo and facility … then we can preserve them” and “if there will be no zoo then animals will get no proper habitat.” This shows an effort to express conditions and cause-and-effect relationships. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “I totally disgree with statement that zoo should be closed” is missing articles, while “There are various type of animals species” has problems with number and noun structure. The sentence beginning “The most renowned animal” is also structurally confused. Practise accurate articles, singular and plural forms, and conditional patterns, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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