Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The wildlife is getting extinct day-by-day. The only solution to keep those extinct animals safe is by keeping them into zoos. Some people say that we no longer need to keep animals in the zoos and so zoos should be closed. I completely disagree with this statement and I will be giving suitable reasons in the upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with, extinct animals will totally disappeared if they are not taken care properly. Although, zoos are the only place where every animal is taken care of properly regardless the weather, also given proper food meal and provided a lot stuff for their entertainment. Moreover, zoologists are also hired to look after their health and to heal animals with their wounds and pain. Thus, zoos became a proper house of many animals as well as birds and the employees working over there becomes their friends and family.

Furthermore, zoo is a picnic spot for families with small children. As the young ones are fond of seeing any animal or wild animal or bird which they never saw, can give them a real life experience of seeing them. Undoubtedly, there are few zoos which are not a public zoo but it is a home which is specially made to take care of each and every kind. For example, The Vanatara in Gujarat, India which is managed by Mr. Anant Ambani and his team. They cure many animals, also take care of the endangered as well as extinct specis with proper food supplies and certified care takers, doctors and zoologists.

To cocnlude, I would say that keeping the zoo closed will be the worst decision as it not save animals and can be a probabiltity that we won't see any animals in the upcoming time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you completely disagree with closing zoos, and the conclusion maintains that view. You give relevant reasons, including animal care and the educational experience for children, and the Vanatara example helps make the discussion more specific. However, the reasons are not developed equally. The claim that zoos are the “only place” animals can be cared for is broad and would be stronger with explanation of why other conservation options are insufficient. The family-visit point is relevant, but its connection to whether zoos should remain open needs to be made more explicit. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation and supporting detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” help readers follow the progression, and the Vanatara example is placed with the animal-care argument. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. The second body paragraph moves from zoos as picnic spots to specialist animal-care centres without fully explaining how these points support the same argument. “Although” at the start of the animal-care discussion also introduces a contrast that is not completed. Use linking expressions only when their logical relationship is accurate, and make the connection between each example and your position explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “zoologists,” “endangered,” “certified care takers,” and “real life experience,” which helps communicate your ideas about conservation and education. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “proper food supplies.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “animals in the zoos,” “a lot stuff,” and “a proper house of many animals” do not sound natural in context. Spelling errors such as “specis,” “cocnlude,” and “probabiltity” also reduce accuracy. Build a more reliable range by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling, while choosing precise terms rather than repeating “proper.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a conditional idea in the conclusion and a relative clause in the example. Meaning is generally understandable, but some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction make parts difficult to read. For example, “extinct animals will totally disappeared” needs a consistent future form, while “the employees … becomes” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The sentence beginning “As the young ones are fond of seeing…” is not completed with a clear main clause, and “Although” introduces an unfinished contrast. Practise checking each sentence for a complete main clause, then review verb forms and agreement, especially in longer sentences.

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