Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

With the concern of captivating the creatures in the Zoo for the entertainment of the people many environmentalist and ecologist says zoos to close down as we do not want animals kept inside the Zoo's. I understand the concern about their free will to enjoy thje nature in the forest within their habitat but disagree with the side as we need zoos around to save some of the endangered species which are near to the extinction and also for the education of the young kids. This essay will discuss further to support my view.

The global warming has adversely affected some of the species through frequent occuring of draughts which killed many animals and reduced some species in a mere numbers that zoologist recommend this to move to the zoo for their care taking and inbreeding to keep them in existence. Also with the change in the environement some species find it harder to get food as their nearest step down carnivores have migrated to several hundred kilometer further in search of their essentials which this species were incapable of such long distance due to their nature of build. This keeps zoo still in need to provide them with the shelter, food and water for their existence.

Most of the young kids first met this creatures in the zoo which they get taught in classroom which provides them with the real view of their existence with the eyes which cannot be fullfilled by such looking at television. This keeps their knowledge upto date to identify the threat knowingly from their past records and also thorugh zoo keeper knowledge about their living in such dense forests in wilderness.

Overall, all living species should be allowed to roam free in their habitat without captivation in zoo but some still need human help which zoo can only provide in time to keep their existence in check. Children also love to engage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you disagree with closing zoos, while acknowledging that animals should generally live freely. You address two relevant reasons—protecting endangered species and educating children—and explain that zoos can provide care when animals struggle to survive in changing conditions. This meets the task well, and the conservation argument is supported with examples of drought and difficulty finding food. However, the education point is less fully developed: the claim that seeing animals in person is better than television is not followed by a specific example of what children learn or how this benefits conservation. The conclusion also ends with the brief, undeveloped statement “Children also love to engage.” Developing this point and making the final position more decisive would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present separate reasons, and a conclusion returns to the issue. This gives the reader an overall route through your argument. Some links between ideas, however, are difficult to follow, particularly in the long second paragraph, where climate effects, migration, food shortages and zoo care are packed into extended sentences. Phrases such as “Also” and “This keeps” are used repeatedly and do not always make the relationship between claims precise. The final paragraph introduces “Children also love to engage” without explaining what they engage with. Use clearer topic sentences, divide complex explanations into shorter units, and make references such as “this species” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “endangered species,” “extinction,” “inbreeding,” “habitat” and “wilderness,” which helps communicate the subject and shows ambition. However, inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning harder to interpret. For example, “captivating the creatures” does not naturally express keeping animals in captivity, while “reduced some species in a mere numbers” and “nearest step down carnivores” are unclear. There are also spelling errors such as “environement,” “fullfilled” and “thorugh.” Aim for precise, natural combinations rather than complex wording for its own sake, and proofread spelling and word forms. More consistent accuracy would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses explaining causes and results, as in the discussion of droughts and animals’ difficulty finding food. However, complex sentences are often not controlled successfully, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction can make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “many environmentalist and ecologist says” has agreement and plural problems, while “which this species were incapable” does not form a clear grammatical clause. The opening sentence is also difficult to parse because several ideas are joined together. Practise building one main idea per sentence, then add subordinate clauses with clear subjects and verbs. Check agreement and article use, and use punctuation to separate complete thoughts.

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