Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS General Essentials · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

We no longer need to have animals kept in zoos, so zoos should be closed.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Peaple belive that animal life should not be preserved in zoo therefor ,zoo's should be closed. we will ellaborate some aspect biheind this argument in this eassy whereas i belive that zoo's will stay open with some develoment as well as wide ground for wield creiatuer who have bigger size.

To begin with let's shade some light on first resone why shuld zoo closed is that zoo's riestice thier natuer to hunt for thier food. Moerover animales loss thier freedom. this mean that if human fullfill thier needs by serving then in cage then as result they forget to hunt which also disturb the life cycle of natue whereas animal loss thier fredoom by preserved in zoo's for human entertainment. for example according to recent study by wield life assosiation that mostly animal life dead in zoo's due to lack of care as well as no proper manegment for basice requarement such as food type or which typr envierment they belong

In other hand masses arugu that we sould keep animal life in zoo's to protect them from hunting and priserve thier spices. this mean natives who hunt the animal for thier skin or body part will be minimies by keeping then in zoo's futhermore human can able to save those spices who alomt exstint in the world and only alive in some parts of world. For instence my friend father workes in zoo's who discloes while a juarenailest interviewed him for WHO survey in which his father mention mostly spices zoo's holds are exstint due to repedly change in envierment

in conclution i belive that zoo's should stay open and develop special system for feeding ingredients as per animal life style .in addition expent their cage area where they can relex.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you disagree with closing zoos and recommend keeping them open with improvements. You address both sides by discussing animals’ loss of freedom and the possible role of zoos in protecting endangered species, and you include examples to support these points. However, some ideas are less fully explained than others. For instance, the claim that zoo animals “forget to hunt” is not connected clearly to the wider effects on wildlife, while the example about your friend’s father is difficult to follow and does not clearly show how zoos prevent extinction. Develop each main point with a direct explanation and a relevant, clearly described example, and make your final recommendation more specific.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, the sequence from animals losing freedom to a study about deaths in zoos is not fully explained, and “this mean” does not clearly identify which preceding idea it refers to. Paragraphing is appropriate, but clearer topic sentences and more precise referencing would improve progression. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “freedom,” “hunt,” “protect,” “extinct,” and “environment,” and you try to express ideas about animal welfare and conservation. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make parts of the argument difficult to understand, as in “riestice,” “wield creiatuer,” and “priserve thier spices.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “feeding ingredients” and “wide ground.” These issues limit the clarity and control of your vocabulary. Build a reliable set of correctly spelled topic words and learn them in natural combinations, such as “provide suitable food,” “expand enclosures,” and “protect endangered species.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “which.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “this mean that if human fullfill thier needs by serving then in cage” has an incomplete and confusing structure, while “masses arugu that we sould keep” lacks accurate subject–verb construction. Sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, with several sentences beginning in lowercase or running together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause; check verb agreement and punctuation during revision.

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